Baby Bird

Story of many baby birds.

Baby Bird

Woven into a nest

Tucked deep into your mother’s breast

 

Wind tosses you

 

Upon the ground

Waiting to be found

 

Your mother flies away

 

You fought

But you now rot

Author's Note

I don't know what to think of this. Please review!

Reviews

[Amanda Dawn Sanderson-G..]

This is sad but the honest truth. I found a baby bird once that had wonder quite far from it's own fallen tree and attempted to care for it until it was capable of caring for itself... but he died through the night and I felt so down about not being able to save him from his fate of death because of a fallen mishap. I enjoyed it because I connected with it... and I like a short poem with deep meanings, it's very good.

[YouoweYoupay]

*frowns* Aww........ : (

[trainwreck]

Its an interesting write, very straightforward. I like it.

[Linear]

Harsh reality, many will try to fly high into the sky, but alas some will fail, fall and rot

Good poem

[Midday_Mystery]

This is really the 25th time I have read this poem.... I just love it so much!

[littlelilypurplebride]

sad ending but beautiful things in the nature don't last for ever sadly. nice work even though last part threw me off but nice piece god bless lily

[Moflo]

I kinda like the sincerity of it. Also its nice and simple and strait to the point, which is great. The only revision I could think of is maybe changing the last word, something about "rot" kinda throws the poem off, I feel.

[Ashley Myers]

you have this sweet little poem and the BAM! it hits you lol. maybe im sick, but i kinda found it humorous. i love an imals and i love nature, just for some reason, i read it and was like omg when i read the last line. the word rot really sticks out in that last part. its kinda like listening to an orchestra. its so beautiful, but then someone hits an off note or screaches, and you cringe. idk how to explain it any other way. it was good in a werid sort of different way. thats not saying it was bad because its deffinately not, just different.

[Kat24]

hi,
this is really good. good job. Kat24

[Cynthia]

A very sad ending, it makes me sigh of the baby birds. However, thats just a truth of the baby birds, truth kill us with pain XD However, I love how you tell the stroy of nature, just a truth.
Its easily relateble, and I thinl thats interesting.
Good Job!