Hot Chocolate

Hot Chocolate

A Poem by Cherry Lai^_^♥~~
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If hot chocolate could warm everyone's heart, why can't it warm mine's?

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Hot chocolate,
Why can't you warm my heart?
Why tears came rolling down my chin?
Why you are so cold?

Hot chocolate,
My heart is filled with sadness,
Tears seems endless.
Please help me...

Hot chocolate,
The start of warmth,
Why aren't you warming my heart?
Why aren't you hot?

Hot chocolate,
I've stand enough,
Please bring me everything 
which belongs to me...

© 2012 Cherry Lai^_^♥~~


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Short but delicate. I think it would be better if you rhyme the last word in each sentence, then it will be more fluent. I like your idea that why can't hot chocolate is hot but can't warm your heart, I'd like to read more about this poem. I hope next time is a longer poem. But however, this is absolutely a fantastic piece. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Short but delicate. I think it would be better if you rhyme the last word in each sentence, then it will be more fluent. I like your idea that why can't hot chocolate is hot but can't warm your heart, I'd like to read more about this poem. I hope next time is a longer poem. But however, this is absolutely a fantastic piece. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Cherry Lai^_^♥~~
Cherry Lai^_^♥~~

Hong Kong, China



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