A Place To Be Genuine And True

A Place To Be Genuine And True

A Poem by Marie Harrison
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A fantasy place that could happen in life.

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A Place To Be Genuine And True

Look up high in the sky that’s swirled with downy

Puffs of pink, blue and apricot cotton candy.

 

Down below where the free and the happy roam,

Their golden roads stretch as far as the eye can see.

 

Where cars never hit dogs and wars are games

Played in the bright sparkling aqua blue swimming pools.

 

Where there are no rules or

Limits to how much fun you can have

In days, minutes or seconds.

 

A place where laughter is

Encouraged and frowns are frowned upon.

 

A place where your imagination

Can soar as high as it wants to

There are no limits to conform to,

But boredom never sets in either.

 

A place where you can hold

Someone’s hand without committing a sin

And even grin as much as

You wish to, or at

Least until you turn blue.

 

It’s a place where you can be

Genuine and true without being rude

A place where black crude isn’t needed.

 

Maybe we can succeed by

Pretending that this place exists here,

That the seeds of truth and

Being genuine have already been planted.

© 2010 Marie Harrison


Author's Note

Marie Harrison
I was thinking of a place that's a fantasy, but it could actually exist here, if that was our true goal.

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I love the imagery of this. It paints a beautiful picture. Makes me wish this place was real so i could escape to it right now. This poem was really good but for me it was lacking something in flow and rhythm I think that if you could find something constant to put into each stanza like a rhyming line or same number of lines to a stanza or something like that it would make the poem that much better of course this poem is fine just the way it is if you decide to just leave it alone. Great job and keep writing.
Much Love,
Tallulah

Posted 13 Years Ago


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This would be a very beautiful place indeed. There's nothing wrong with dreaming, because that's what causes changes, for the good or bad, it's dreaming.

Posted 13 Years Ago


a very cheerful, yet hopeful piece. nice job.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Wonderful imagery...
Sorry I don't have any suggestions to make.
~Gage

Posted 13 Years Ago


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This is a fantasy I would love to see brought to life. Your innocent beautiful world is an oasis we really need right now. I loved it. It took me back in time.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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It paints a really good picture... I want to go there! And it seems to have that dream-like quality that fits with the topic.

XX Maddie

Posted 13 Years Ago


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indeed to could exist here..we have the power to move mountains..what a wonder thought to start the day with :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


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A very good fantasy. I believe when Clinton was President. World had a chance. Amazing what poor leadership can do in 10 years. Your poem is hope and good dreams. I believe we need to hold on to our hope and greats. Life can change for the better. We hope. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago


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I used to watch that painting show with Bob Ross every
Saturday morning. This reminds me of him with his
'happy' everything! hahaha Nice write :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Wow. This is now in my favorites. It made me think of my childhood... I had a good childhood. I want it back. Thank you for the memmories...

Posted 13 Years Ago


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KL
So whimsical and carefree this poem makes you feel! You brought me back to my childhood for a second there... ah, to live like each day was your first again! My only suggestion is to change 'where dogs never are hit by cars' to 'where dogs are never hit by cars,' it flows a lot better.

Good stuff, Marie, thanks for sharing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Added on August 11, 2010
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Tags: Fantasy, No Limits, Love, Freedom, Fun, Beauty, Happiness, Being Genuine

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Marie Harrison
Marie Harrison

Atlanta, GA



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