BEAST

A savage being

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

BEAST

Tear my flesh

Eat me whole

Chew me into little bites

Let me drown

In your black hole

Acid burns me like ice

Absorb me in your system

Because I’m under your nails

I run through your blood

I make your blood pump

I’m your reason for living

I’m under your skin

There’s no way you’ll win

I’m your beast 

Author's Note

I was thinking about an addictiion and how it controls everything about us when we are truly addicts

Reviews

[Gone]

Definately describes a person trying to escape an addiction. It's like it rises up as the most terrible beast, trying to convince you that your 'resistance is futile'. That you are destined to become it's Borg drone (sorry 4 the StarTrek imagery - yes I am that sad).

This is very descriptive but seemed to lack enough emotion. Unfortunately I can't quite isolate why that was. It's like you left something out but I don't know what it could be.

Please don't get me wrong. This is a very good poem, I just sense you have more. Hope that makes sense to you.

[Jibey]

Sometimes people can bring out the animal desires within us too...

[Arsenic Nemesis]

This is fantastic! It's so wonderfully worded and just... wowowwowowowowowow. I can't describe it. You know when you just love something and can't find out to describe why you love it, you just do? Yeah, that's me right now! This is wondeful and oNFIOANWOIGT love it! Keep up the good work!~

[Linear]

Drown me in your black hole lol shant tell you the picture that painted for me.
And yes addiction is certainly a beast that can devour one whole or piecemeal, well written Marie

[Undying Glory]

wow this was just great work, brilliant imagery here. i love your analogy of the "beast" being the addiction, and that sure reminded me of Metallica's song "Master of Puppets". (Yes, it was written about drug abuse.) Bullet For My Valentine also has a song like that called "The Last Fight", and this poem sure reminded me of those, effectively tripling this poem's power. nice work!!

[Cynthia]

good imagery! yeah, when i am truly addicted to something, that hobby, subject is really a beast XD! Nice written poem, I love it!

[Doug Ordunio]

Striking images! Powerful,but the one thing longed for was a line that ended in the word "soul" because of the possibilities of rhyme...:-)

[Magdelena]

I like this.. It shows so much into the mind of what true addiction is.. Great piece.

Mags xx

[hannajade]

this is a good poem to describe addiction, it is so irritating that other people make money off others weaknesses!!

[sarah]

That is so true great write