Snow Cone

A summer poem

Snow Cone

Lime green, sweet snow cone

Your tangy taste takes me home

 

Back to the days when I was so carefree

 To jump in the pool after your mind numbing freeze

 

You bring me pleasure

You make me smile

One taste of you

 Takes me a million miles

 

You leave me with a fluorescent grin

You make me feel young again

Reviews

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

So darling~ Love and freedom is what I felt here.

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Good..!!! Its great to be on that path again..!!!

[KAREN]

Yeah, to feel care free and young again. Wait, your poem did that for me.

[Michael of Gilead]

Oh yes, I could go for one right now! Sweet refreshment :)

[Poe Redd]

Oh, snow cones. So simple, such good memories. Love the poem!

[Tina Kline]

Back when life was still simple. A truly fun summer poem.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem captured those simple pleasures of life....
Happiness should always be this easy to find.

[李[A]]

I like how the structure and color of this poem represent the snow cone itself. Figurative language was interesting here: hyperbole (stanza three). As a next step, I would look into combining certain parts: stanza two-- mind numbing --> mind-numbing. You would want to hyphenate them to prevent separation of one idea. Thanks for sharing this!

[SamBug]

Playful and adorable. I loved this

[Darkest Rose]

I love this poem,it flows really well. I haven't ever had a snow cone but you make this poem so life like it feels like I'm eating it. Amazing write :)