Downcast sky (January morning)

Downcast sky (January morning)

A Poem by Nostalgicc


glass blemished by droplets
of moisture
clinging closely
upon contact, like 
the reconciled remnants
of a watery puzzle, 
shifting down 
against the pull and pluck
of a vicious wintry wind,
against forces that wish
to pry apart the 
bonds of brethren.

Expanse of field
rolling relentlessly
left to right,
a yellowed and
archaic death
far from the
fastidious decay of Fall, 
stalks ruffled by the 
gesture of a grand hand
to encompass all that
was and all that passed
by my window's glass.

Sluggish clouds
sauntering by with
roiling underbellies
around the perimeter,
as if the artist grew
frustrated with his work
and concentrated
all his enmity
from a failed career and 
faltering health
on the trenchant tip
of his charcoal pencil,
cross-hatching the line 
between reality and

As the car edged forward
on slick pavement,
I surveyed a scene of
sluggish clouds
set against 
a dreary sky.  



© 2013 Nostalgicc

Author's Note

Critique. Review. Read. Favorite. Comment. Favorite. All that good shtuff.


My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register

Featured Review


This poem is amazing. I fell in love with it just beginning with the first few lines. The way it flowed was what amazed me. I wish I could write like this.

Posted 6 Years Ago

I really enjoyed this! Its well descriptive and it keeps you pulled in. It paints a picture and it makes you feel like you´re actually there. Well done!

Posted 6 Years Ago

This was a great poem and the imagery was incredible!

Posted 6 Years Ago

Wow! Amazing imagery! I personally love the rain since I find it to be rejuvenating, and the way you described an overcast Autumn scene, it's flawless! Amazing job!

Posted 6 Years Ago

Pricas Hrvatski?!

Moji roditelji su se preselili u ameriku prije nego sto sam bila rodena, ali znam dosta dobro pricati.

Do you still live in Croatia?

Posted 7 Years Ago

[send message][befriend] Subscribe
I want to really enjoy this, but the way I read the staggered and staccato lines is -- well -- staccato and staggered. For a poem about that "expanse of field" all around us, the way my inner voice approaches the piece is unsatisfactory.

This says more about the way I read than the way you write, though. Otherwise, there is so much to praise that I agree with other reviewers.

Posted 7 Years Ago

technically skilled poetry

Posted 7 Years Ago

Truly beautiful writing

Posted 7 Years Ago

First Page first
Previous Page prev
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


18 Reviews
Shelved in 3 Libraries
Added on January 19, 2013
Last Updated on January 19, 2013
Tags: poetry, poem, sky, clouds, winter



East coast

Been here since 2007. 20. East Coast. I dig ambient soundscape music and often write while listening to Boards of Canada or Aphex Twin. Don't be afraid to offer serious constructive criticism, .. more..

Achife Achife

A Story by Nostalgicc

Wrecked kid Wrecked kid

A Story by Nostalgicc

Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..

Shadow Shadow

A Poem by A. Amos

Pain Pain

A Poem by A. Amos