Downcast sky (January morning)

Downcast sky (January morning)

A Poem by Nostalgicc
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Poem.

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Window
glass blemished by droplets
of moisture
clinging closely
upon contact, like 
the reconciled remnants
of a watery puzzle, 
shifting down 
against the pull and pluck
of a vicious wintry wind,
against forces that wish
to pry apart the 
bonds of brethren.

Expanse of field
rolling relentlessly
left to right,
a yellowed and
archaic death
far from the
fastidious decay of Fall, 
stalks ruffled by the 
gesture of a grand hand
extended
to encompass all that
was and all that passed
by my window's glass.

Sluggish clouds
sauntering by with
roiling underbellies
cross-hatched
around the perimeter,
as if the artist grew
frustrated with his work
and concentrated
all his enmity
from a failed career and 
faltering health
on the trenchant tip
of his charcoal pencil,
cross-hatching the line 
between reality and
restraint. 

As the car edged forward
on slick pavement,
I surveyed a scene of
sluggish clouds
set against 
a dreary sky.  

-CS

    
 
 
 

© 2013 Nostalgicc


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1.18.13

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This poem is amazing. I fell in love with it just beginning with the first few lines. The way it flowed was what amazed me. I wish I could write like this.

Posted 6 Years Ago


I really enjoyed this! Its well descriptive and it keeps you pulled in. It paints a picture and it makes you feel like you´re actually there. Well done!

Posted 6 Years Ago


This was a great poem and the imagery was incredible!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Wow! Amazing imagery! I personally love the rain since I find it to be rejuvenating, and the way you described an overcast Autumn scene, it's flawless! Amazing job!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Pricas Hrvatski?!

Moji roditelji su se preselili u ameriku prije nego sto sam bila rodena, ali znam dosta dobro pricati.

Do you still live in Croatia?

Posted 7 Years Ago


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I want to really enjoy this, but the way I read the staggered and staccato lines is -- well -- staccato and staggered. For a poem about that "expanse of field" all around us, the way my inner voice approaches the piece is unsatisfactory.

This says more about the way I read than the way you write, though. Otherwise, there is so much to praise that I agree with other reviewers.

Posted 7 Years Ago


technically skilled poetry

Posted 7 Years Ago


Truly beautiful writing

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Nostalgicc
Nostalgicc

East coast



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Been here since 2007. 20. East Coast. I dig ambient soundscape music and often write while listening to Boards of Canada or Aphex Twin. Don't be afraid to offer serious constructive criticism, .. more..

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