Fish, Water, Edge

Fish, Water, Edge

A Poem by nostal
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Fish around an edge

Bodies briefly

Seem like sheets

Of silver, skimming around

The edges of the pond.

Tales glinting under

The water

Pass the vision

As bursts of energy,

Brushing loose

Strands of weed-

Sea material brought in by

Nature’s tidy brush-

And heading towards

Other realms of the pond.

Softening the water

With their presence.

 

4-1-10, edited 4-7-10

 

© 2010 nostal


Author's Note

nostal
4-7-10
Written seven days ago. Just got around to editing and polishing it. Finished result here.

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I like the concept of this, it shimmers.

I find it great when you write like a painter. You should do more of that, write for pure beauty's sake.

My only critique would perhaps be to have stanzas?

Posted 8 Years Ago


This was so very peaceful for me.. I could see the silver come alive through your words.. I love to stand near a pond or river and watch the fish.. there seems such freedom..like in your words.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I like the hint of humanity at the beginning and then the sort of naturalistic take with the prose. beautiful :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


I like the flow of this, and the picture adds a nice touch. Kudos.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Joe
This was pretty.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Nice, i like the abstract feeling of it :)

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Been here since 2007. 16. I dig ambient soundscape music and often write while listening to Boards of Canada or Aphex Twin. Don't be afraid to offer serious constructive criticism, for I take .. more..

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