Fish, Water, Edge

Fish, Water, Edge

A Poem by nostal




Fish around an edge

Bodies briefly

Seem like sheets

Of silver, skimming around

The edges of the pond.

Tales glinting under

The water

Pass the vision

As bursts of energy,

Brushing loose

Strands of weed-

Sea material brought in by

Nature’s tidy brush-

And heading towards

Other realms of the pond.

Softening the water

With their presence.


4-1-10, edited 4-7-10


© 2010 nostal

Author's Note

Written seven days ago. Just got around to editing and polishing it. Finished result here.

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Great poem. A friend of mine used to have a backyard pond. We used to see those sheets of silver all the time.

Awesome work. :)

Posted 6 Months Ago

I like the concept of this, it shimmers.

I find it great when you write like a painter. You should do more of that, write for pure beauty's sake.

My only critique would perhaps be to have stanzas?

Posted 9 Years Ago

This was so very peaceful for me.. I could see the silver come alive through your words.. I love to stand near a pond or river and watch the fish.. there seems such in your words.

Posted 12 Years Ago

I like the hint of humanity at the beginning and then the sort of naturalistic take with the prose. beautiful :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

I like the flow of this, and the picture adds a nice touch. Kudos.

Posted 12 Years Ago

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This was pretty.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Nice, i like the abstract feeling of it :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Added on April 7, 2010
Last Updated on April 7, 2010




Been here since 2007. 16. I dig ambient soundscape music and often write while listening to Boards of Canada or Aphex Twin. Don't be afraid to offer serious constructive criticism, for I take .. more..

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