My Mother

My Mother

A Poem by christina sherin
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This poem is about a mother's love towards her family.It describes how independent and with how much determination ,she raises her children.

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                                     MY MOTHER
The lamp of the family is mother,
The light of the family is mother,
She is the one who weaves the family,
With love and compassion.

A flower that always blooms,
Spreading happiness across families,
Wipes up her children tears,
When they are in distress.


Her toil for her family never sheds,
A loving mother compared to god,
God has given her as gift to me and you,
So cheer up and be glad

© 2016 christina sherin


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christina sherin
a mother's love

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Your poem is well-stated in support of mothers everywhere. I've never been a mother, but I have the highest respect for mothers becuz of the way they sacrifice so much to put their children first. I like the way your message starts with the lamp metaphor, then ends with the God comparison, becuz both are beacons of enlightenment, encouragement, & guidance.

As you continue writing, I encourage you to try crafting original metaphors instead of a line like: "A flower that always blooms" -- such lines have been written hundreds of times. Even if you want to stay with the "flower" metaphor, show me more about this flower, so I can really picture how it embodies the mom. For example, it smells sweet or it tickles our noses when we're feeling down. Reach a little further to express your message by using the senses, so we can see & feel & smell & hear & taste what you mean.

Posted 4 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

christina sherin

4 Years Ago

SURE.I'LL KEEP IN MIND WHAT YOU'VE SAID WHILE WRITING THE NEXT POEM.THANK U FOR YOUR PATIENCE TO REA.. read more



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yes, God couldn't be everywhere so he created mothers.Nice poem.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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A lovely little ode to your Mother. Such odes do not need to be groundbreaking to express their intent and purpose.

The first piece of work i have read of yours. A simple beginning that will become transformative with time.

Keep writing.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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christina sherin

4 Years Ago

thank u so much:)
A simple and sweet piece...it is a known fact that God cannot be everywhere so he sent an angel in form of mother. One could relate to this poem.
A nice write. Keep writing :-)


Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

christina sherin

4 Years Ago

thanx so much:)
Your poem is well-stated in support of mothers everywhere. I've never been a mother, but I have the highest respect for mothers becuz of the way they sacrifice so much to put their children first. I like the way your message starts with the lamp metaphor, then ends with the God comparison, becuz both are beacons of enlightenment, encouragement, & guidance.

As you continue writing, I encourage you to try crafting original metaphors instead of a line like: "A flower that always blooms" -- such lines have been written hundreds of times. Even if you want to stay with the "flower" metaphor, show me more about this flower, so I can really picture how it embodies the mom. For example, it smells sweet or it tickles our noses when we're feeling down. Reach a little further to express your message by using the senses, so we can see & feel & smell & hear & taste what you mean.

Posted 4 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

christina sherin

4 Years Ago

SURE.I'LL KEEP IN MIND WHAT YOU'VE SAID WHILE WRITING THE NEXT POEM.THANK U FOR YOUR PATIENCE TO REA.. read more
This poem is so good, I am usually not into poetry but, hell, I love it! Keep your work on point! :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

christina sherin

4 Years Ago

thank u so much:)
A nice poem hailing the the sweetest word in any language I.e. mother..
Mother and mother's love are never paralleled with any other thing in this universe.
Thank you for this poem.
Check the word ( typo)T5he in the third line of first stanza .

Thanks for sharing.. Keep writing.


Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice one.
Mother is a beautiful topic :) keep it up :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

christina sherin

4 Years Ago

thank u so much:)

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