... A Thought.

... A Thought.

A Chapter by chrysantheranium

"Eureka"
This familiar expression lies on foreign tongue,
With my eyes hooked on the ceiling above me
In a never-ending staring contest.

I stare, I think, I breathe
I draw in my breath and hold it
Until I can feel my heart beat
In my ears.

I blink. I lose.


Eureka.


© 2019 chrysantheranium


Author's Note

chrysantheranium
Ignore basic grammatical errors, as there are some rules that, as a writer, I don't care to abide by. I feel restricted when following these rules, and since I have such a hard time getting my thoughts across, I'd rather break a few rules than be grammatically "perfect."

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"until I can feel my heartbeat in my ears" - that's a striking line, very vivid, I've felt that a lot of times myself.
I didn't quite understand the context of the word 'eureka', though.
I also loved the line 'talk like a dictionary walk like an empty diary' that you used previously in the note up above. Looking forward to read more of this!

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

chrysantheranium

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the review, Zoya! I'll keep that in mind for future additions to the book. Eureka was .. read more
Zoya

1 Year Ago

Ohh, I get it now. And you're welcome :)



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DAH
Breathing, one of the most phenomenal actions in the universe. Without oxygen we'd be dead in seconds. It's always a good experience to see how long we can hold it in; there's also the test of breathing out and holding ... this is an exciting minimalist poem, to the point, exact. I love your word-economy.

Bravo!
DAH

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

chrysantheranium

10 Months Ago

Thank you, DAH! It's amazing what can come out of something so simple despite it being an instinct. .. read more
DAH

10 Months Ago

My pleasure, chrysantheranium!

give the man a goldfish in a jar or a cigar... it really dont matter which.. he's a winner any which way... N

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

chrysantheranium

10 Months Ago

Ooh, I didn't know there were prizes, haha! Thanks for taking the time to read this Neville, I hope .. read more
Neville

10 Months Ago

I most certainly enjoyed it...
Very cool; a window through which I see a little piece of who you really are. You made me smile. One question: Did you breathe before you blinked? Ha! Just messing with you...
Don't give up, and don't ever, ever throw away anything you write. Just let your thoughts percolate for a while, then revisit what you wrote.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

chrysantheranium

10 Months Ago

Thank you so much! I'm glad to have put a smile on your face. In the past I threw away everything I .. read more
I like that you'd rather break the rules, this poem is lovely and I think you got your point across very well, always liked the word Eureka.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

chrysantheranium

1 Year Ago

Thank you, WeakFreak! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
"until I can feel my heartbeat in my ears" - that's a striking line, very vivid, I've felt that a lot of times myself.
I didn't quite understand the context of the word 'eureka', though.
I also loved the line 'talk like a dictionary walk like an empty diary' that you used previously in the note up above. Looking forward to read more of this!

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

chrysantheranium

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the review, Zoya! I'll keep that in mind for future additions to the book. Eureka was .. read more
Zoya

1 Year Ago

Ohh, I get it now. And you're welcome :)
I love how this poem relates to all of the next chapter very clever work here I like this method and identify so much with the blink line

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

chrysantheranium

1 Year Ago

Thank you! I'm proud to have given you comfort within the blank lines leading to the epiphany that s.. read more

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