Hanahaki

Hanahaki

A Poem by chrysantheranium
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Prompt Jan 25, 2020: "Are ― do those flowers have canine teeth?" "Interesting that you can identify them specifically as canine teeth." "Do the goddang flowers have teeth?!"

"
.
Pair of roses,
Whispering softly
Into each other's
Petals
.
She told me pretty things
About myself,
And so I listened
To the devil
.
Her eyes so wide
I fell behind
The lie she dug
In a gaze's grave,
.
That tourmaline,
Sticky sweet chocolate scene
Pupils dilated
When it's far too late
.
She told me she wasn't
Big on poetry,
Not a fan of flowers
And wine
.
She told me,
"Please, get over me
But won't you be
My Valentine?"
.
As springs pressed on,
She pushed me down
With the weight of
Her canine teeth
.
Tearing me up,
Weeding up the bud
Of the shell and the husk
She made of me
.
And to this day,
Though the rain washed away
The rose that threatened
My will to bloom,
.
I suffer from
Your doglike bites,
Scars in my petals
Like bones in a tomb
.
.
Do you see what you've done to me?
.
Can't you tell that you're drowning me?
.
I cry out to the stars
When it gets cold and dark,
Cursing my wine red remnants
Under the moon.

© 2021 chrysantheranium


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Author's Note

chrysantheranium
Ignore basic grammatical errors when giving critiques, please - I'm aware of the rules I'm breaking, but I feel restricted when following these rules. Due to my mental health and since I have such a hard time getting my thoughts across, I'd rather break a few rules than be grammatically "perfect." Just let me write for the fun of it and so I can cope with my experiences - it's not that deep.

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I think this is a really great poem!!!
You shouldn't have to worry about grammatical errors when writing a poem, poetry should be free, so don't pay 'tention to the people who don't like your poetry because it's not "Grammatically perfect". Poetry's not supposed to be perfect, it's supposed to be something that comes from the heart or brain or legs or arms (lol). Whether it be grammatically correct or not. I, for one, think this is a great poem. Don't listen to the people who say it's not, okay? 😊

100/100

Nix ❤️😊

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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roses are red
violets achuu
I am once bitten
now always blue.

I was looking at a picture in my doctor's office today.
it is a picture of a flower, but from across the room it looks like the neck and head of a Tyrannosaurus Rex.
How odd the coincidence of seeing that and now reading your poem
we spring new seeds, we regrow ourselves, but those teeth marks regrow with us.
j.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

We've all been there at least once. Learn from it and let go of it.

Posted 2 Months Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

chrysantheranium

2 Weeks Ago

Oh, if it only were that simple.
I think this is a really great poem!!!
You shouldn't have to worry about grammatical errors when writing a poem, poetry should be free, so don't pay 'tention to the people who don't like your poetry because it's not "Grammatically perfect". Poetry's not supposed to be perfect, it's supposed to be something that comes from the heart or brain or legs or arms (lol). Whether it be grammatically correct or not. I, for one, think this is a great poem. Don't listen to the people who say it's not, okay? 😊

100/100

Nix ❤️😊

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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chrysantheranium

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"Answer." || | Twenty-year-old male with an anchor tied to his teeth. I'm not very careful with my words, as I was never taught to be, but I promise to try and keep you afloat to the best of my abilit.. more..

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