Erring

Mistakes are sometimes not our fault, but we can be the reason. Behind our back aren't only truths and lies, but also lies dressed in truths.

As I bow my head

I felt the invisible weight

The weight of an unknown sin

From a person I haven't seen

I caused her tears, she caused mine

And we both ignored the signs

But we're both in love

We prayed for the same thing from above

Will happiness be in the form of victory?

Or will it be in the form of a hero in debris?

But I do know I have the right

The right to lose after the fight

I just cannot lie and say goodbye

I cannot give up for I may die

If I caused pain without me knowing

Then let me woe without people seeing

But please do not forget

The pains behind my silhouette

For this erring may be painful 

I have nothing to explain to all

~

Simp

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You are amazing dear poet. Your words direct, honest and real. You made the reader understand your statements. Life is a hard teacher. We learn things to make us wiser and stronger. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Kyle Sky]

very very nice. the mood and atmosphere is very strong and expressive. the flow of your words makes the presentation of the theme so powerful. personally, i teared up a bit when i got to the part "The pains behind my silhouette"...
I absolutely love this. Very great work.

[kublakhan27]

I understand where you're coming from here...you always try to do the right thing but it's impossible to do so all the time, and it's equally impossible to please everyone, so we can only do the best for ourselves and hope that we harm no one along the way...powerful work, well done SM.

[SimpleMind]

That's very kind of you to Khan..! Thanks a lot.. and yes, really impossible to please even some people.. Gotta stick of being who I am ;)

[kublakhan27]

You're very welcome :)

[Mike Emil]

mike emil approves
this is a good poem
HAI!!!

[SimpleMind]

Glad you like this one Mike Emil :)

[Mike Emil]

you are welcome to kohlrabi theater
once it is established
of course
HAI!!!

[SimpleMind]

where is that?

[zach h.]

I really like how powerful each stanza is and how well they flow together. The word choices that you used to get your point across I think were sublime. Nicely done.

[SimpleMind]

Thank you Zach... I'm glad it's still good despite me avoiding difficult English words :D

[Chris]

Well spoken and formed...

[SimpleMind]

Thanks Chris ...

[Sami Khalil]

"But please do not forget

The pains behind my silhouette




For this erring may be painful

I have nothing to explain to all"

I felt the power or sadness and regret. You have the right to win or lose. A splendid poem...:)..................

[SimpleMind]

Thank you Sami. We all do have, but sometimes winning doesn't seem right... but not wrong either. Silly me >.

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:).....................