Run

Run

A Story by ClaireBear
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Better keep running! :D

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My bare feet were scratched from all the twigs and rocks. My breath was hurried, forced, and fast. My chest pounded with the painful beat of my heart. But I couldn't stop. No way. If I stopped running, then...I would die. Well that's cheerful isn't it? Yeah, I think not. The dog's barking was slowly growing louder as the Hunters were gaining on me. And, like in the movies, I had reached a cliff.
          "Damn it, really?! Really, why me?! Why now?!", I shouted to no one in particular. But, also like in movies, the ocean was in front of me. Here goes 5 years of swimming lessons. Closing my eyes, I hopped off the cliff, feeling the rush of the air beside me and the salty sea spray sprinkle my face. Carefully I assumed diving position, and the water was inches from my face, but it felt like hours for my hands to feel it's cold sensation. By some miracle, I hit no rocks.
          As my body hit the sand, I forced my numb legs to pound off of the ground, sending me upwards towards the surface. And then I felt something hit the base of my neck - like when you get a shot at the doctors. Uh-oh. Slowly my hands reached towards the pain, and sure enough they yanked out a small dart, which was sure to mean I would die from the dart's poisonous venom any second now.
          While the darkness took over my vision, I somehow managed to start laughing like a crazy person. "You may have got me!" I shouted, "But you'll never find him! He knows you're after him, he'll mislead you! Just bet on it!"
          All I felt were a pair of strong hands grab my shoulders, shaking me. Someone was shouting my name. "Anna! Anna I'm here!" I knew it. My dead father had come to gather me. I took his hand. And then it was all over.
 

© 2011 ClaireBear


Author's Note

ClaireBear
Felt dark when I wrote this. >:) Hope you enjoy, and let your imagination take you on the rest of the adventures of Anna! Comments are always appreciated!

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I so wish I could know more of Anna's story! You should totally post more... just sayin'. ;)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Found It hilarious and laughed. But such a sad way to end it. While at the same, sweet. Her father came to get her ^^ sweet. Shows family's there all the time

Posted 11 Years Ago


A few sentences in, I thought it was going to simply be a dramatic scene full of visual fodder, but when I got to, "Well that's cheerful isn't it?" I knew humor was going to be part as well. But you laced the funny with the dramatic superbly. This is a very dramatic scene that leaves you guessing, but the several funny injections brings the narrator on a all-too-human level to the reader. Kudos!

Posted 11 Years Ago


thanks guys i love the support! :D

Posted 11 Years Ago


That's twice today that I'm left wondering: What will happen next? Your prose is well crafted and the descriptives are thrilling. Action packed goodness that needs more context. Please continue with this. I think the world could use a bit more.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Man, this was intense! I lived the clarity of your writing. This almost sounds like the ending to a story. Not the end, but close enough to scare you. A very suspense filled piece!
I wish to know more about the runaway Anna! And the character herself was just charming and spiteful. "Damn it, really?!"

Posted 11 Years Ago


:) thank ya'll for the nice review!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Nice imagery! And when u described the shot on the neck, I felt a prickly sensation on my own neck. :p nicely done Claire!

Posted 11 Years Ago


:O wow...

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ooooh! Instense, Claire!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago



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ClaireBear
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Hey my name's Claire and I'm 13. I love music, I love writing, I love reading, and I love eating. Music inspires me to keep moving on. I like bands and singers like Avril Lavigne, Justin Bieber, Angel.. more..

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