What They Lost

What They Lost

A Poem by ClaireBear
"

hold on to what you have and appreciate it, for their is always someone that has it worse than you.

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The people who are weak
They are the ones that reek
From the stains of their tears.
 
And the scars, increasing from years
Of denying the pain, and the hurt.
They are tossed in the dirt
To be shut up and hidden 
And anything good is forbidden.
That is how they live everyday 
For there is no other way;
The happiness is blocked out
And they scream and they shout.
But no one comes to their aid,
Slowly they begin to fade.
And now they have left 
For there is no bigger theft
Than what they have  lost.

© 2011 ClaireBear


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Wow. That's really deep. I'm having trouble processing who it is about; I hope it isn't about you, otherwise...YOU NEED A HUG! Aahaha :] But i love it: it's deep, emotional, and shows how the people who push you away, need to have someone who won't give in.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Maybe the people that push us away need to be slapped. >.<

I really liked this, it was deep and very in your face. We scream and shout but nobody wants to hear...

Posted 11 Years Ago


firstly, the font and format detract from it, making it hard to read, plus the hard, harsh edges of the font don't fit the poem. speak simply, let the words promote themselves. the rhymes are good, but sometimes they don't flow as well as they could, like you were scrambling for a rhyme. i do really like the thoughts behind this poem, however, you've something great in the making?

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was good. Really good!

Posted 11 Years Ago


No it's not about me. i just kinda...wrote it

Posted 11 Years Ago


Rly good!

Posted 11 Years Ago


The words come in torrents like shots fired! It makes me wanna scream "Man Down!" for every person that folds under life's losses. I can't help but think of the Homeless, as I look over this again. I've known many and when I was a kid, I was on the street; seeing the world through different lenses. Most just walk by, looking through rose tinted glasses (Carnage visors, yo!) but a clear focus on what we have leads to better priorities.

This is a grand bit of insight and wonderfully done!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Wow! This is amazing! There are no words to describe how moved I am by this poem. Keep up the fantastic work!!!:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


I really like this. Not only is it just so effortlessly written, but also the image and message it brings.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Nice poem Claire, good flow and rhyme; sad truth that is clearly, yet achingly told.
"For their is no other way..." and
"For their is no bigger theft." In both of these lines 'their' should be 'there'.
Both small issues in a very nice poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago



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ClaireBear

Portland, OR



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Hey my name's Claire and I'm 13. I love music, I love writing, I love reading, and I love eating. Music inspires me to keep moving on. I like bands and singers like Avril Lavigne, Justin Bieber, Angel.. more..

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