Closing the questions

Closing the questions

A Poem by likesgreeneggsandham

Here lies your life

Chapter and verse

Scrawled and rewritten too many times


You edited out your dishonesties

That sat in plain sight with your secrets

There are too many forgotten recollections


Fragmented memories

You’ve tried to rearrange them

So you can set them free


But the Divine will not process your queries that easily

Wait, therefore, in the small, still spaces

That come falling gently


Between the angst and the anguish

That started to expand into lightness

You sank back behind this form, below the body


Into the cool, depths of quiet silence  

Your mind crashed waves of words above upon a heady shore

Tried to wrestle with you as before


Yet your true Self sat wordlessly

Closing the questions

Never minding the answers  


© 2019 likesgreeneggsandham


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We can and do edit our lives, like a greatest hits collection in an online sbout me section, hoping that others will see and believe us, yet never quite seeing and believing ourselves.
Now all that is required is as much energy and enthusiasm for the bits we ignore, that could be chsnged...if only we didn't cover our ears and shout "nope, not listening. La la la" A little honesty goes a long way, but denial is harder to shift.
So many great lines here that I would feel like im bullying the others by pointing them out.
Natipnal honesty day anyone? :)


Posted 9 Months Ago


This is a very interesting poem. The flow of it could be lightly smoother, however I believe the only reason I had a little trouble was due to how the whole thing is clumped together.

Friendly Suggestion: Put a space after every third line, this will give you 7 sets of 3 lines and then read it out loud as you'll see what I mean, how it changes the flow to be smoother and just might even get the point of the poem across more strongly.

Overall...

I really enjoyed this poem. My favorite two lines were almost right there at the beginning...

"You edited out your dishonesties
That sat in plain sight with your secrets"
~
Poem as a whole, also had a sense of pendulum-like motion/feel to it where you can feel this sense of a struggle going on, to bordering actually finding and able to have peace but just... not quite, though it hangs there like a possibility.

Well done!

~CarthageThorne


Posted 9 Months Ago


likesgreeneggsandham

9 Months Ago

An excellent suggestion! Thanks so much it does read much better that way! I’m prone to clumpyness.. read more
I feel like I should be in this state of presence and it so eludes me....

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

likesgreeneggsandham

9 Months Ago

Am certainly not constantly present I often drift into the mind and down the rabbit hole of question.. read more
Who watches the watcher?...

am awaiting the snow to pause... as it has paused me.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

likesgreeneggsandham

9 Months Ago

as always you are asking the one important question behind the questions.

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Durban, KwaZulu-Natal , South Africa



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Fledgling poet on a mystical journey. My poems touch on themes of sex, madness, addiction, loneliness, pain, you name it. I also write about my pilgrimage towards finding the Self. more..

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