Words

Words

A Poem by clairvoyantmars

Her voice lingers at the back of her throat

Mouth closed, lips pressed

And being shut inside those four walls

She has no need to speak

For there is no one to talk to

Except those voices in her head

And the people from her memories

No music can make her sing

If she does, the people outside will hear

And silence her once again

She swallows back the words

For even a single moan can be heard

In this lonely world of hers

She is mute

Words…

Sounds…

Forbidden.

Silence…

Quiet…

Poke and prod at her sanity

A taunting ringing in her ears

Boredom…

Loneliness…

Longing…

All lingering at the back of her throat

Wanting to burst out

Aching to scream out

“I’m here!”

For fear that her silence

Has erased her existence

This concrete box she lives in

Illuminated with artificial light

Only a peephole to peek outside

Even then, it is only a glimpse

She lies on her bed

Idly staring at the ceiling

Tears streaming at the sides of her head

Still, no words come out

Until she whispers

“I’m here.

I’m never gone.

I just miss you…”

© 2011 clairvoyantmars


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This is indeed captivating to read. It catches your attention as you read it. We all go through these situations where we are silenced and can't manage to say the things we want to express. Its a big problem. Only the sorrow in our hearts can be our companion. This was really sad and it makes you feel bad for her for what she must be living through.



Posted 7 Years Ago


masterful use of the very words this person cannot express. wonderful paradoxes as well. this piece is amazing and i congratulate you, not many can write as well as this.

Posted 7 Years Ago


"For fear that her silence
Has erased her existence"
-Those are creative lines and I like them. They stood out.

I think there are, unfortunately, a handful of girls who experience this. I'm not always quite sure of what we could do about it. Obviously not shush them, but I mean, how do you get people to do that? Maybe I interpreted that incorrectly. Sorry if that's the case - I'm just thinkin'.
This poem kinda gives me the idea that you've experienced something like that. You describe the feelings and what goes on so well. I may be wrong, but you should take my comment about the good descriptions as a compliment!
If you've really had this happen, don't let them shush you. Let them know you're there! Don't let the others stand above you. Don't worry about the other people.

Marvelous job!

Posted 7 Years Ago


This definitely created a vision in my head. I struggled to find the meaning behind it and couldn't figure it out until the very end. J'adore.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This peace struck home with me. I've gone through this more times than I can remember

Posted 8 Years Ago


You captured my attention until the very end. I loved how she was worried about being forgotten and then she finally whispered what she wanted to say.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Wow, drew me in and kept me there. Very hard for a writer to do, but you did it well. Excellent job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


wow, really good. no spelling or grammar mistakes. i like how you used free-form of poetry.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is great, The first few lines really got my attention.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Great word choice

Posted 8 Years Ago



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I've been seriously starting to write my own novels since 2008. So far, I've finished three novels and have a lot of unfinished ones piled up. I also write short stories and poems and the occasional s.. more..

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