Fresh Cuts

Your eyes of blue push me down and leave me falling
It scares my heart
You told me lies, I knew, but still believed them
That scares my heart

I wonder if there is anyone here forever
I always seem to get left behind
I see the truth and it's still a fight to walk away from you
Your smile still melts my heart

I hoped that maybe you were real
This was no dream that I was living
I thought that maybe you were real
I always get left behind
I think it's time that I run.

Reviews

[Myenigma]

its sweet, yet grief stricken

"You told me lies, I knew, but still believed them "
lies are usually meant to hurt, if you believe them then
they have done what they wanted to do.
"I always get left behind
I think it's time that I run."
lol i love this line the best,
you can always take your time :)

[Baby Ricochet]

The broken hearted blues. Good Poem

[Brenden Taylor]

Very nice. I like the use of repetition here - it highlights the dynamic between the second and third stanzas. And it would be interesting to know what you think you should "run" to...follow up poem? Eh? Eh?

Overall, good work.