Your Guard

Locked away

Your Guard

 

 

                 You

                 Can try to

Polish these bones

To find the key

Or wash my

Eyes to be

Set free

Yet I will

Die to win

And Sink in peace

To know you lived

In only bars and gates

Find your heart

To live regret

Laugh In pain

And reek

Distress

Love lonely

For your loves recessed, so just confess

         There is no way out, so choose

             To sink               and lose

              Find the            Only peace

              Smell the             Guilt and

                   Feed on your disgrace

                  Cope with sin or

                     Die in distaste

                      For you will

                         Never find

                            The key

Author's Note

I focused a little more on the format than the poem, I think it shows. Would still love any criticism you guys have! Thanks

Reviews

[KlineXcreed]

I just found you and am glad I did! I like the structure of the poem very creative and the words pierce straight to the heart.

[Einstein Noodle]

eeeyow! i like the Key! that would take some time ... your poem is (to me) straight forward, vindictive and punishing ... wow! must have been a deep hurt experienced by your speaker ... i feel distressed in the reading ... being hurt is universal but our reactions are not ... this one takes it over the edge .. would make for a fine dark movie ... eeyow!
E.

[Insight "MH"]

Cope with sin or
Die in distaste
For you will
Never find
The key

That is a nice finish to the poem, it is a KO finish ^_^

[B]

Oh dear
you really care for this person
and she screwed up big time
let her out
maybe she will repent :P