Copper Portraits

Finding ones self etched in history.

Copper Portraits

 

 

I found a dream

Swept it out from beneath

Covered in a coat

Of grease

 

Gold and bright

Like a coin

Caught inside

The sheets

 

Fought to see

The etched face

So blurred

Discreet

 

It couldn’t be

I screamed

"It's me"

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

mmmmmm very interesting! a hard look at oneself certainly can be shocking ;) i save coins so relate strongly with the looking closely and brushing away the grease :))
E.

[Alfred Kukitz]

It can be quite a surprise for one's face to be looking back at itself and become a historical figure. Sweet!

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we wish upon a penny...and the face so familiar...life blurs us, makes us learn to be discreet.


i really like the ending....although i read the last line as "It's me"

wonderfully done.

i like the short, sharp lines.

[coffeedigest]

Thanks for your kind words. I really like changing the last line as well! Great feedback.
-Josh

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh, i meant the "it's" should have an apostrophe....but yes, in quotation marks it works even better---

[coffeedigest]

somehow I didn't even notice I missed that! All fixed, thanks again!

[Celie Rose]

It was cute. I liked the flow of rhymes. Good job