Young Couples

A bit of a lengthy piece, but I'm not sure about it . . .

We’re a perfect couple,
Us,
Together,
We’ll always be together,
For ever and ever.

We like the same things,
Watch the same TV,
Of course it’s true love!
Sorry, silly me.

I mean, we even eat.
Yeah, both of us eat.
It’s just something we do,
Together, we eat. Just us two.

And we breathe! You do breathe, don’t you?
Yes, of course I breathe, I breathe just like you.
See, I told you what we have is true!

And I’ll tell you what’s really weird!
Yeah, tell them now.
Sometimes we even,
Finish each other’s sentences . . .

Reviews

[A]

Lol this is was really cute and sweet, pleasant to read!
Beautifully written.

[DreyaArt]

well done, sounds like a conversation between a couple. Thats cute. very nice. thank you for writritng.
but if i might say, breath and breathe are two different words. I believe breathe is the word your looking for. :)

[Andrea Vargas]

I thought your poem described how most people feel about there first love, and I thought it was beatiful!

[☯]

Haha, I really loved the last part! Very nice job, it describes how much love can mean to someone. I really liked this, great job. :)

[raindroplove]

haha very cute funny to

[Matthew Smith]

Lol. This was a cute little poem. Cheesy as get out, but that's obviously aimed for. It has a child-like simplicity to it.