"The Game of Life"

"The Game of Life"

A Poem by Connie L. Kuntz

Our life's a game
That has no name
We're all the same
Shall we begin?

Opening doors
As our mind soars
And it ignores
Screams from within

How our heart aches
Each time it breaks
And evil takes
Away our grin

When sun has set
Filled with regret
We can't forget
Our every sin

Running away
Everyday
Don't want to play
Games we can't win.

© 2020 Connie L. Kuntz


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Immaculate rhyming the flow could use a bit of work though. The sentence "Shall we begin" could be taken out in my opinion as it interrupts the flow. "Do not go where the path may lead, go instead where there is no path and leave a trail." -Ralph Waldo Emerson
-Kay

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Connie L. Kuntz

3 Years Ago

thank you so much for your insight! I will definitely keep it in mind when revising.



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Great rhyming, easy to identify with on some of these cold, gloomy nights. Well done.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Didn't enjoy it. Too cliche.

Posted 3 Years Ago


A brilliant young poet has said take out that line, she's probably right. Shall? But, I like that word - shall. "He will not save me; I shall drown." or "He shall not save me I shall drown." A meaningful difference. I like the sentence, "Shall we dance." Why not? Is the night not our own.?

I like your poem.

Posted 3 Years Ago


The writing style you use in this feels childlike, simply-stated, a bit one-dimensional -- the way a child might present a view of life as being black & white. Along with this, the storyline seems to devolve into a bit of a childish rant or refusal to play, illustrating in a subtle way that it's childish to fight it, becuz life turns out to be life & we must live it or give it up! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Years Ago


Time for a beer, to help distance that fear or possibly a tall gin to try and renew that grin, but those games, although they can be hard to win, they are not always a sin.
just sayin

Posted 3 Years Ago


It sure can seem like a game, and depending on our frame of mind at the time will usually dictate the outcome as winner or loser. Rhyming is spot on and your point is one I can definitely identify with. Good job!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Immaculate rhyming the flow could use a bit of work though. The sentence "Shall we begin" could be taken out in my opinion as it interrupts the flow. "Do not go where the path may lead, go instead where there is no path and leave a trail." -Ralph Waldo Emerson
-Kay

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Connie L. Kuntz

3 Years Ago

thank you so much for your insight! I will definitely keep it in mind when revising.

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Connie L. Kuntz
Connie L. Kuntz

Wooster, OH



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I am 45, and have had a few poems published in different anthologies, but have yet to get really serious about my writing. My goal has always been to publish an actual book, and at my age I'm already .. more..

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