A Clear Night

A Clear Night

A Poem by conspicuousleaf
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I thought this up as a wrote it. I'm not sure if it's good so feel free to comment.

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The moon sits high,
emitting bright rays of light
that dance on the ripples
in the river.

The sky is clear.
Dotted in the sky, the stars
dance - shining and twirling
in their glittery dresses

The wind passes slowly,
brushing against the leaves
on the waving trees which 
cast gloomy shadows on the ground.

The dark of the night
lay patiently ahead,
swallowing all colour -
leaving behind grey.

© 2014 conspicuousleaf


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conspicuousleaf
I would like constructive criticism please.

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I think that if you added more metaphors into your poetry it would really help to improve them even more. Try doing a couple of extended similes. From what I read so far you try mainly to evoke the feeling a certain place or scene evokes. All the poems I've read so far that do that successfully use very accurate similes and metaphors.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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conspicuousleaf

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much! I will try that thank you.



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I think that if you added more metaphors into your poetry it would really help to improve them even more. Try doing a couple of extended similes. From what I read so far you try mainly to evoke the feeling a certain place or scene evokes. All the poems I've read so far that do that successfully use very accurate similes and metaphors.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

conspicuousleaf

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much! I will try that thank you.

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Louth, Lincolnshire, United Kingdom



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