A Clear Night

I thought this up as a wrote it. I'm not sure if it's good so feel free to comment.

The moon sits high,

emitting bright rays of light

that dance on the ripples

in the river.

The sky is clear.

Dotted in the sky, the stars

dance - shining and twirling

in their glittery dresses

The wind passes slowly,

brushing against the leaves

on the waving trees which 

cast gloomy shadows on the ground.

The dark of the night

lay patiently ahead,

swallowing all colour -

leaving behind grey.

Author's Note

I would like constructive criticism please.

Reviews

[laRagazza]

I think that if you added more metaphors into your poetry it would really help to improve them even more. Try doing a couple of extended similes. From what I read so far you try mainly to evoke the feeling a certain place or scene evokes. All the poems I've read so far that do that successfully use very accurate similes and metaphors.

[conspicuousleaf]

Thank you very much! I will try that thank you.