In 20 seconds..

I can feel the cold steel knife

against my skin

Within it's blade it holds my life.

 

In twenty seconds, I will die

 

I hear water dripping in a bucket

as it counts the last seconds of my life.

while the knife gently touches my chest by my silver locket.

 

20, 19, 18, 17...

 

The locket was given to me by my love.

A tear falls in remembrance of my old life.

Soon it was shattered from the rustling of feathers from a dove.

 

16, 15, 14, 13...

 

The cold knife sends chills down my spine.

the knife taunts me that I'm a coward.

Then, he calmly starts to cut me like I'm a swine.

12, 11, 10, 9, 8.....

 

All I see is red

7, 6, 5...

The tears start to fall

4...

My breathing starts to slow down

Soon...3, 2, 1....

I'm dead.

Author's Note

What do you think??

Reviews

[Angelic_Dreamer]

I found it very uncanny if you ask me in a good way. It was a little well demontic in a way and pretty Scream 4ish(take out the suicide I think in the movie). I wonder what you were thinking when u wrote the story(seriously thats a good question not a hurtful one). Good Job but you sort of scared me there on the first line a weebit

[The Invisible Girl]

I'm sorry if I freaked you out a little bit...:( I'm not really sure why I wrote it...truthfully I just started writing it...I wasn't trying to get be demonic...

[Angelic_Dreamer]

its fine it was still enjoyable in a way atleast its a good thing that you didn't mean to be demontic I sometimes enjoy scary things but not when it occurs in life now thats just really eerie

[The Invisible Girl]

Plus, I didn't write this because I have suicidal thoughts! I am very happy with my life and I have God too. At least you did enjoy it except for the eeriness/creepiness of it! :)

[Angelic_Dreamer]

I'm glad u are religious. God is amazing isn't he?What a wonderful world he created for us...full of marvelous writers that he created like u:)

[The Invisible Girl]

Yes, God is marvelous! :D And don't forget you are one of those awesome writers too! :)

[Angelic_Dreamer]

thanks whatever u say I guess I'll try to agree

[***The Lost***]

A spine chilling write....I love it.

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks!! :) Glad you liked it!

[Edward]

A bone chilling scene that the victums never live to tell. This peice gives readers insight on how things like these happen. Great write and great read i look forward to more work of yours :D

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks for reading!! :) Can't wait to read your play!! :)

[CreativeCookie]

Quick Q: Are you holding the knife or is someone else?

[The Invisible Girl]

That's the mystery!

[CreativeCookie]

No fair! You can't do this to me, I'll spend forever trying to figure it out for myself using context clues.

[The Invisible Girl]

Fine! I'll tell you if you really want to know. lol :) Someone else is holding the knife. O.o

[CreativeCookie]

Thank you!

[The Invisible Girl]

lol :)

[jemaral]

I think it was better not revealed

[CreativeCookie]

Yes, I guess it was. But my natrurally inqusitive nature got in the way of my judgement. (like it so often does) Sorry about that, but I had to know or I might not get any sleep tonight from the sensation of not knowing (yes, I know, that sounded dramatic, but it's true.)

[jemaral]

lol you sound like a cat

[CreativeCookie]

I have two cats and the neighbor's cat comes over alot, so I might as well have three. I guess I've played with them a little to much. I may have to hang out with Trooper (my horse) more often!

[The Fallen]

Intense, amazing, beautifully written :) Doesn't surprise me cause your a awesome writer ;D

[The Invisible Girl]

Aww! Thanks! You are an awesome writer too!!

[The Fallen]

Your welcome and Hows that chapter coming xD

[The Invisible Girl]

which one? lol

[The Fallen]

the one for our book lol

[The Invisible Girl]

oh! *nervous laugh* I'm working on it! I'm getting to the part where the Pack panicks from the death of a member.

[The Fallen]

xD Okay! (:

[The Invisible Girl]

sorry its taking forever..

[The Fallen]

Lol I dont mind

[The Invisible Girl]

okay! :) lol

[The Fallen]

I have the next chapter out for mah book >.

[The Invisible Girl]

I'll try to read it! I have two nosy teachers (librarians) who are watching me *minimizes screen*.........that was close lol

[The Fallen]

xD

[Horizon K.]

Ohh!! So intensely creepy! Like an opener to a horror book or something!

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks! :D

[Felicity's Eve]

So intense...

Scarily exquisite... :)

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks!! :)

[Felicity's Eve]

:)