Another Place

My being calls out for another place
to transverse this country and space.
Yet people want to go on vacation
before they've seen the landscape
of rocky shield and spearhead mountains,
stampeding rivers and barraging waterfalls.

I want to reach the place,
where the tree lines end, then cross it
into the frozen expanse and no man's land.

The hawks on guard will cry like sirens,
warning of this prisoners escape,
I transcend the gate
to fall into a white, dampening embrace.

I will stand as the icebergs crumble and
ride the waves, frozen midway
into the northern nights
my heart caught up in boreal lights.

How I yearn to pour my echo into the
white plutonian shore, adrift with flow
where distance is only the wrinkles
of white paper like snow.

Reviews

[Gleb Zavlanov]

A very interesting, innovative and beautiful write. Bravo!

[Sarah Coll]

I love this, it's so well written. You've took your thoughts and feelings and made them incredible empathetic. It's a longing which most people have at some point in their life but you've made your own stance clear, it's easy to see and appreciate. It's honestly an inspirational piece. I especially love:
"The hawks on guard will cry like sirens,
warning of this prisoners escape,
I transcend the gate
to fall into a white, dampening embrace."
What strong imagery! Well done!

[CosminDZS]

You're too kind, I'm glad you took from the piece as much as you did. Outwardly I wouldn't say I'm the nature type but it's an unavoidable topic all together. I'm hoping to see some more work coming from your direction,

thanks again Sarah.

[Sarah Coll]

And I look forward to seeing more of yours too!

[Bri 810]

Reminds me of some native american artwork.

[CosminDZS]

I could see where that connection comes from and I do appreciate indigenous culture, so thank you for the compliment!

[Cosmic Rainbow]

'I want to reach the place, where the tree lines end.'
That is a great line, brilliant : )

[CosminDZS]

Although you like the line, any thoughts on the rest of the poem? Many thanks for the comment!

[Cosmic Rainbow]

It's great, I totally understand where you are coming from, I can really feel it : )
I am rubbish at giving reviews lol

[Cosmic Rainbow]

That line was just my fave that's all!

[CosminDZS]

That wasn't rubbish, it was honest and humble :)

[Matt Sayer]

Tremendously evocative imagery here, Cosmin! Storming the gates, breaching the boundaries to flee to the endless shoreline and the beckoning horizon. Shucking the sightless gaze of the masses to pierce the natural beauty hidden beyond. Lovely :)

[CosminDZS]

Thanks Matt, I'm just really into snow and stuff.

[alien]

such great imagery and so beautifully written.
i like the part about the northern lights, they've always fascinated me (:

[CosminDZS]

Many thanks, I hope it made you even more fascinated

[Scott Metro]

This is wonderful....
A very nice look into the vastness of your thoughts...perhaps your celestial viewings have opened your mind to future escapades into the realm that is just beyond our sight.
Very good.
Enjoyed it.
Scott

[CosminDZS]

Although I'm not the spiritual type, at this point in life, I just want to absorb as much lively experience as possible. Indulging in the sky and embracing nature is part of that.

[Scott Metro]

HAH...you think you are not the spiritual type..maybe not the religious type..you embrace nature and indulge yourself into deep thought about our universe...
I see just a tiny sliver of the spiritual...just mu humble opinion.
:)
S.

[CosminDZS]

Well that's just a conflict of what we define spiritual. But I will agree with you in spirit ;)

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...Thank you for penning...:).....................

[CosminDZS]

And to you, for reading

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)....................