Hurts

Hurts

A Poem by Shannon Math
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I was thinking while I'm tired so it might not be good.

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I had a code to unlock
The shield to my heart.

He found out that stupid code of mine,
Using it to lower my defenses to break my heart yet again.
Rushing me into oblivion in his heart and me..
To seriously think.. He loved me again.
So many pieces to pick back up... D****t.

© 2011 Shannon Math


Author's Note

Shannon Math
Honest Opinion. Personally, I think it's horrible.

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You got to walk as far as you could or else the next time he is not going to break your heart again but worst; your death.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I like how you set-up this poem. You told a interesting story with a good ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


it's not that bad. but i think i've read much better things written by you :) try to polish it a bit!

Posted 8 Years Ago


i wouldnt say horrible but i think you can do better try again you cando it *~*

Posted 8 Years Ago


No, it's not horrible, It's a nice little acrostic poem with a well-dropped shoe at the ending. Good work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Not horrible, but it could be WAY better. Honestly I think it would be better if it had more rhyming in it. I know its hard for some people but it really makes your poetry better....

Posted 8 Years Ago


i like the style you chose to write in, its like finding a hidden message right in front of your eyes, well done. but i do think it can be brushed up a little...

Posted 8 Years Ago


Hmm. I don't think it's HORRIBLE, but it could be better. Poems like this to me seem like something I'd do in class.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Good write. The words it form was clever.

Posted 8 Years Ago


THIS IS AMAZING!! I love this

Posted 8 Years Ago



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