Without

Without

A Poem by crazysox

A writer without a pen
A duck without a wing
A boat without a captain
A singer who cannot sing.
A reader without a book
A bear without a friend
A light without a shadow
An email that won't send.

A dog without a tail
A sock without a shoe
they aren’t nearly as depressing
as I am without you.

© 2011 crazysox


Author's Note

crazysox
I took Judy's advice and changed one of the lines. It made it more modern, too. Thanks everyone!

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I really enjoyed this poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Very cute and fun to read. Nice write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Love it. It has a gentle motion about it that is accessible and delightful.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Great rhythm and I just love how you wrote something so romantic without the usual lovey-dovey & (sometimes) sickeningly cliche lines that are usually in such poems. From the first word, you had me entranced. The sadness of it all only makes this poem so much more wonderful. It is well written, creative, and wonderful. I love it!

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Posted 8 Years Ago


This is so cute! I really enjoyed this not only because it's outlandishly cute, but because the grammar and the repetition (anaphora, etc. --you'll learn later about rhetoric) is all wonderful. As a very young author, I find this to be so deep and so fulfilling at the same time from someone your age. Kudos to you youngster!

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Posted 8 Years Ago


This is cute, & creative.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


Very nicely done. Enjoyed this. I wonder if letter without a stamp or something similar would disrupt the flow less. Looking forward to reading more of your work, young writer :)

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Posted 8 Years Ago


I really loved this. I don't know if it's meant to be comical, but it reminds me of some stuff i've written. The last line feels like a great punchline. I love the rhythm and the feeling.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


A very nice poem. I like the way you set-up this poem. Your words are true at the end. Need to have good friends to keep us happy. A excellent poem.
Coyote

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Posted 8 Years Ago



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Tags: writer, pen, duck, wing, boat, captain, singer, sing, reader, book, bear, friend, light, shadow, letter, send, dog, tail, sock, shoe, nearly, depressing, as, I, am, without, you
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