Night

Night

A Poem by Ariana H
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This poem is about the time when your laying in bed, thinking, trying to go to sleep. The time between awake and asleep.

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Laying in my bed,
Growing goosebumps on my arms.
Scary illusions in the darkness.
Memories flowing through my head.
Never knew silence could be so loud.
Wanting to scream,
Make some sound.
I’d give anything to leave my darkened mind.
Things I don’t want to remember,
Coming into view.
Hate this time of night.
When all you can do is think.
That time in the night,
Between awake and asleep.

© 2011 Ariana H


Author's Note

Ariana H
Please comment and tell me things I should fix or if you like it(:

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This poems really well thought out, although reading it feels as if there is something missing. I personally think you could express the language of the poem a bit more, as in, use stronger adjectives to capture the readers imagination. i definitly think this poem has great potential though :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I think that this is something that comes from a restless night. I can almost see you peering at a person...


Lovely and thought inspiring.

Posted 6 Years Ago


I think i liked...no..there ain't need to fix..lol, well, it's a piece, i liked this, thank god it was short, it saves my time to read...lol, that's nice to read, language that you've used's much appropriate in each line...
well, it's "NIGHT"...
well writtten, you got me girl...:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


That dazed time is sometimes the best, sometimes the worst. Nicely described.

Posted 8 Years Ago


"Never knew silence could be so loud." Amazing. This is stanza is so insightful, and throughout the poem you successively captured the entire process of drifting into sleep. Great write

Posted 8 Years Ago


owm! love this one =DDD

Posted 8 Years Ago


I really like this, the description of the time of night is perfect.
though, the flow of the first few lines is off.
but overall great write!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Honnestly been writting awhile and one thing I know is the ultimate judge is yourself your descriptions of the night hours is perfect
and you show a true talent with words so if it works to you that is what matters most really good post stay crazy Gonzo

Posted 8 Years Ago


This poems really well thought out, although reading it feels as if there is something missing. I personally think you could express the language of the poem a bit more, as in, use stronger adjectives to capture the readers imagination. i definitly think this poem has great potential though :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is something that I haven't read about yet and it's very intriguing how you describe it. I really like the lines, "Never knew silence could be so loud." Really good job.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

yay i love you

Posted 8 Years Ago



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