AFFRAID OF BEING ALONE

AFFRAID OF BEING ALONE

A Poem by Crusaderscross

She is gone
Nowhere in sight

I ache her
She still stays gone

I scream COME BACK
She answers not

I whisper her name
No reply

I start to wonder
A voice speaks

Leave me pee
She flushes

© 2010 Crusaderscross


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Those last two lines really got to me :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Argh, I think it was good up until the last two lines. They kind of threw me off.
I think you ought to take those two last lines and use them in a different write.

but that's just my opinion.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Crusaderscross
Crusaderscross

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