"I start to think (take the pill)
Gun goes off,
nothing happens"
I'm a little lost here. Just curious where the gun came in. Had it been in hand, or is it just a metaphor type thing.
Other than that, this was a good read. I really like the first verse. Being prone to migraines myself, I always wait until I can't stand the thumping any longer before taking my medicine. I also like the second verse too.
"I start to think (take the pill)
Gun goes off,
nothing happens"
I'm a little lost here. Just curious where the gun came in. Had it been in hand, or is it just a metaphor type thing.
Other than that, this was a good read. I really like the first verse. Being prone to migraines myself, I always wait until I can't stand the thumping any longer before taking my medicine. I also like the second verse too.
... Wow, nice poem... what a painful poem, very well written too...
Favorite lines:
"I start to think (take the pill)
Gun goes off,
Nothing happens"
I'm not quite sure what's going on, but it sounds interesting, very interesting. I think it could use just a bit more details though...
"I drink a beer"
What a way to cure a headache.... lol, nicely written. :D