Separation Anxiety

Love and Worship

I find the distance awful

But it’s not the loneliness

That makes me weep like a fool

Nor is it the empty press

Of slender emotions, expressionless

Drifting ghostlike over an ice flow

Whispering softly, tepid… no, less… much less

I hear them in my ear, terrifying and cold

Rising off the hard water

Murmurs, whimpering, and how my eyes burn

In the blowing snow

And water, at there lack of even hollow piety

As if deceit could return

To me what you give

The desire, amor, to even live

Loneliness is for fools

And Earth for the dead

It is divinity that I lose

When we’re apart

And why your absence I so dread

Reviews

[Tricessimus]

The shadow of love so beautifully rendered here, we too often focus on the heady floral bouquet of twinning or the fetid angst of betrayal. The ice floe metaphor is well landed and expressive though it took me a couple of readings for me to fully appreciate. How could I not admire this gem a few times to capture its facets after such a great conclusion? A delightful read.

[Shannon]

Thank you so much. Those vaporous emotions were all that was left after his beloved was gone just floating over a frozen river; everything had turned to ice. Hell is cold. Thank you again.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a long distance relationship can make us feel that dread of separation...
I sense not loneliness so much as a worry that she will find another to desire...
I start thinking of Terry Stafford's song "Suspicion"
could deceit return?
check line 12..."their"?
this is a most absorbing write...one we do not want to separate ourselves from as readers.
j.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

What a chilling, grand piece. It’s executed wonderfully here. It’s entirely beautiful, word for word, hard to find even a favorite line, it’s all breathtaking. This is really, truly a piece I can’t help but admire, there’s so much passion and love in your inspiring poetry. That last line is really fitting and chilling. The visuals in here are mind blowing and gorgeous. Thank you so much for sharing!

[Shannon]

I’ve. never had my work described as chilling before… I’m humbled and so happy you enjoy the piece. The word “love” is used and thrown around so much as our language is so limited; that’s why I love poetry, it speaks in metaphor and pictures; the lie that tells the truth; but that word, “love” is so useless to describe two people who are utterly consumed with one another. Heaven and Earth can pass away, and I don’t care lol Thank you

[Katarzyna Anna Koziorow..]

A beautiful poem, filled with sensitivity to the word, the metaphors are unique. Best regards and I wish you a lot of creative inspiration.

[Shannon]

Thank you very much Kat. I’m so happy that so many people found this a moving piece. That’s why were all here. As poets, we are like ancient Cypress trees in a dry swamp that refuse to die lol. Thanks

[Harmony-Lee]

What a beautiful piece Shannon.
The ebb and flow of your words took my mind and heart on a journey.
Your word choice superb and mesmerising.
Thank you for sharing this piece.

[Shannon]

You’re so welcome and I’m very happy you liked the piece. It almost wrote itself. It’s funny how that works. :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

You are amazing! And this is a "dog-eared" page if ever I read a syntax of words that staggered my mind so completely. Wow. Thank you for the inspiration you are!

[Shannon]

Oh my god… I don’t even know what to say… so kind… thank you. Sometimes the muse just goes off and things flow. I was watching vapor rise off a frozen river at -25 fahrenheit, and I was alone, and I thought that’s how passion is, you are a literal god for about 5 minutes before being hurled back into the abyss with nothing but foggy emotions left.

[Chris Shaw]

Wonderful poetic expression here Shannon. Some first class lines. Divine love. Isn't that something we all seek and yet it is all but impossible to find.

Chris

[Shannon]

Indeed, it’s a fleeting thing and you have to hold on for dear life cause when you reach that, it’s like the ocean tides… just find a rock and hold on till the next round. Thank you for your kind words; I’m so pleased you like it.

[Chris Shaw]

I did. A pleasure to read you Shannon.