The Unstoppable Tears

The Unstoppable Tears

A Poem by Cynthia Man
"

Something I felt yesterday....BTW, thanks for reading and reviewing :)

"
It was something I couldn't explain,
with words I could have reached,
it was an urgency which shock me  
that tears refused to hold back.

Like an unfixable tap which kept running,
like a bucket of water which got knocked over,
these tears left me clueless and wondering
how these emotions came from.

I wasn't displeased at things around,
I wasn't disturbed by worries or trouble
but I found myself incredibly in need
of crying thousands drops of tears.

I'd lost control of my emotions
it was running wild like escaped animals
I tried to capture and lock it back,
but it slipped from me once more.

The special haunted ride within myself,
with this ghostly monster's escaping.
I looked up trying to remember
the times I smiled without doubts.

© 2012 Cynthia Man


Author's Note

Cynthia Man
It was what I felt yesterday...Crying for nothing yet I felt sad somehow...It hurts a lot, and thats why I wrote this...
And I know this needs a lot of polishing, so I was hoping for some suggestion... I's ok to tell me this poem is bad and it sucks, since I know it is :) But I hope you can also tell me to improve ;))

Anyways, thanks for reading and your time :DD

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Reviews

Made me cry :( A fabulous and wonderfully written poem! 100/100 :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


Katerina

7 Years Ago

Hope ur feeling better :)
This is how flooded emotions feel like, sometimes we can get overwhelmed with them not even knowing why. I too have had this happen before. Sometimes so uncontrolable it just takes control over you. This is very good, my only suggestion is to watch the grammer and sentence structure in you work. Your thoughts are very well described and put out there. I really love it.

Jimmy

Posted 7 Years Ago


I love how you wrote the poem, you must have turned your tears into words. You represented all the sadness that I guess you have felt through this poem and it's beautiful. I'm not saying that you be sad but this is a nice piece of emotion you have written here

Lovely write

Posted 7 Years Ago


I love the imagery... and glad that you can cry to express whatever you feel that time

Posted 7 Years Ago


Some days are just like that, crying and feeling sad for no reason.
Very well penned!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Magnificent. Beautiful. Amzing. ♥
We all usually go through this sometime in our lifetime.

I LOVED it!
Keep it up~ ♥
=^-^=

Posted 7 Years Ago


Cynthia Man

7 Years Ago

thx:)
PokemonFan#1

7 Years Ago

Welcome~ ♥ ^-^
[send message][befriend] Subscribe
K.G
A very lovely poem, it seems light and like a butterflie who flutters around yet you can feel the sorrow in it, (probly dosnt help that im listening to this song :If I Apologised by Iain Ballamy)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Cynthia Man

7 Years Ago

thank you for your review so much ;DDD
K.G

7 Years Ago

haha ur wellcome very much love :3
the poem was nicely written, a few spelling mistakes but i don't make judgments
as long as the message is strong...your message here has a life of its own and delves
deeply into your psyche...sometimes that is hard to unravel but you have made a wise choice in wrting down your feelings this is how i deal with my internal crisis.
don't stop!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Cynthia Man

7 Years Ago

Thank you for so much :)))
Some suggestions: lower the use of 'I's, 'it's', and expand your vocabulary a bit.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Cynthia Man

7 Years Ago

thank you so much :)
Tears are a good thing. Mean we are still alive and have emotion left. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


Cynthia Man

7 Years Ago

thans :)

First Page first
Previous Page prev
1
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

1801 Views
17 Reviews
Rating
Added on September 19, 2012
Last Updated on September 19, 2012

Author

Cynthia Man
Cynthia Man

Hong Kong



About
GlitterGeek.com I'm Cynthia, and I come from Hong Kong. I'd been writing poems for a year or so. And now Looking for ways to improve myself, thats why I joined Writers Cafe. ( I used to have an a.. more..

Writing

Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..