Illuminating Emptiness

Illuminating Emptiness

A Poem by Ben Taylor

Balefully glancing from the sky
Coruscating blandly from our
Monotonous six color
Polychrome design scheme.
Your rays
Lapping listlessly at the sights
I dutifully descry.
A pallid lack of inspiration
A tacit lack of meaning
You illuminate our
Copacetic misery
Desiccating our hopes to leave
Them a shriveled, blackened bud
Forever under trodden
Perfectly recalcitrant, the consummate
Amount of struggle to give
Meaning
To our meaning-
lessness.

© 2011 Ben Taylor


Author's Note

Ben Taylor
Sunlight in this poem is intended to have a very loose analogous connection to time.

This poem essentially is stating that the constant degradation of the future we are trying to construct (our hopes) gives us a reason to live; something to strive for.

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A amazing flow of words and description in the poem. I could read your poetry over and over again. The language is very good. So many lines stood out.
"Desiccating our hopes to leave
Them a shriveled, blackened bud"
Thank you for your outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Wow! this was written very beautifully! I really like it!

Posted 10 Years Ago


I absolutely love the complexity of this very short poem. Every word chosen carefully to construct meaning. Definitely a favorite.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Let me get out my dictionary ... wow!

Posted 10 Years Ago


haha verr nice, verr nice, i enjoyed this quite a bit :) the only thing i got hung up on in this was a little word in "Desiccating our hopes to leave// them a shrivelled, blackened bud" and that word would be "a"... it know it's required as is, but going from "them," a plural word or generalizing one, to "a," a singular word just seemed strange. an easy way to fix that (if you happen to agree with this sentiment) would be to just get rid of "a" and pluralize "bud". "Desiccating our hopes to leave.. them shrivelled, blackened buds".
huge meaning in this though, nice and deep, and again, well written. good work man

Posted 10 Years Ago


wow this is amazing, nothing I expected to see based on your "limited poetic experience".
so complex and absolutely wonderful.

Good job :)


Posted 10 Years Ago


Now this is a favourite.

Posted 10 Years Ago


nice work on this poem...

Posted 10 Years Ago


A Junior in high school? Remarkable!--and somewhat intimidating. What school, Ben, MIT High?
You've just given meaninglessness to my meaning.
Great work, young poet.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Added on March 22, 2011
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Ben Taylor
Ben Taylor

Columbia, MO



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