A Poem by Ben Taylor

The withered leaf flees
Bourne aloft by plumes of smoke
Its brethren consumed

© 2011 Ben Taylor

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Seeing what, to most, is not there; giving meaning to seemingly trivial events. Humanizing the inhuman.
As in quantum theory, the observer has altered the observed.

Posted 10 Years Ago

i have a hard time with senryu, they are easy to write, but it is not easy to convey an emotion with such small space...nice job

Posted 10 Years Ago

Oh! they're supposed to be independent of the title? I've always loved reading ones that were indiscernible without the title; they make better use of the available syllables, in my opinion. I need to read up on haiku I suppose.

Yeah, I guess most Haiku don't even have titles. Crapit. My other 3 are inadequate. Anyways, thanks for that though :)
I now know.

Posted 10 Years Ago

A lovely clear visual image... and i like the deeper meaning suggested by brethren. Also, this one works independently of its title, as they are supposed to... i never quite manage that; mine lean heavily on the extra words in the title.

Posted 10 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very nice visual :) Well done.

Posted 10 Years Ago

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Added on March 24, 2011
Last Updated on March 24, 2011
Tags: fire, leaf, autumn


Ben Taylor
Ben Taylor

Columbia, MO

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