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A Poem by Ben Taylor

The brilliance
Burns a line
Between the hidden
Constellations:
An angel's tear,
Swiftly tearing
The fabric of the
Sky.

Eyes locked
In reciprocated
Fulfillment,
Fingers braided
Into a
Future.
Love:
Consummate
In its
Incipience.

You
Blink.

The swiftly
Disappearing
Image is branded
Upon your
Eyelids.
Thunderous mumbles
Of receding
Satisfaction
Fill your
Darkness,
Shaking you
Like a
"Dead Geranium".
A tear,
Formed of what
Used to be,
Escapes the fabric
Of her
Eye.

Your breath is
Gone.

The blink
Ends,
Your dreams
Doused in
Reality.
Relief replaces
Blood
As it is pumped
Through you;
The solidity of
The night
Is inhaled with
Decreasing
Rapidity.

You
Blink.

© 2011 Ben Taylor


Author's Note

Ben Taylor
Okay, so this is a bit cryptic. Basically, the subject sees/remembers two things before falling asleep and blends them in his dream, which horrifies him into wakefulness.

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This is a well-constructed poem with great imagery and form. Love the repetition of the blinking.. most excellent work, as usual, Ben :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Fascinating experience.
I've often wondered what those figures and forms mean--the ones we see when we close our eyes. They can't all be mere residual optical "fragments" carried over from vision's previous use. Some of these pictures are extremely clear--of people and places I, at least, don't recognize.
(Sorry to wander off, Ben.)
Your poem has a mystical feel; is, as usual, well-conceived and well-written. Obviously, thought-provoking, as well.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I didn't understand it (we both know I'm not smart) until I read your comment, now I get it :D
How do you write so... I can't think of a word good enough that I don't overuse, so we're gonna create the term "Bentaylorish" for your poems. Kay? (:
Seriously, all your poems are so...
I don't have words good enough.
You are really talented, or smart, or both.
Amazing write (: xx

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Added on April 5, 2011
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Ben Taylor
Ben Taylor

Columbia, MO



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