Jaded

Jaded

A Poem by Jenny-Jen-Jen
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A poem, meant to be read in a slam-poetry way. The reasons why I feel Jaded.

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Jaded.

 

 

Don't worry, I hear you.

 

Every roll of your eyes that you don't think I see.

Every sigh, as I walk in a room.

Your jokes.

Everytime you counter my 'I love you' with...

Nothing.

 

Don't worry, I hear you.

 

What you tell all your friends...

How stupid I must be.

How I'll never measure up to you.

And I can't draw.

And I can't write.

And it's stupid to waste my time.

 

Don't worry, I hear you.

 

Every laugh, when I make a mistake.

Every 'nice going' when I don't know how to fix it.

And anyone can do community college.

And it's nothing.

And I'm nothing.

 

Don't worry, I hear you.

 

When I can't, sometimes wont, get you what you want.

What a b***h I must be.

How I only think of myself...

And I'm wrong.

And you're right.

And you'd be better off without me.

 

Don't worry, I hear you.

 

How I don't belong in this family.

And how much hate...

And how you'd rather see me...

Every time.

Every word.

Thought and withheld.

But mostly spoken.

 

Don't worry, I hear you.

© 2012 Jenny-Jen-Jen


Author's Note

Jenny-Jen-Jen
It just needed to get out of my head. I would actually like some critique on this poem. It'd be appreciated.

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Don't worry! I hear you. Proabably would show more emotion
Then Don't worry, I hear you. Just add an excalmation point.
I love it, such wonderful emotion shown.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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hmm
WOW such a powerful strong read. I really enjoyed this, it's deep and profound.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wow, I love it :)

I think it's really strong and the message you're conveying is easily found. Loved all the techniques you've used, can't see how it can be made better. But if you do edit and it ends up twice as good as this let me know how you done it lol. :)

Favorite list XD

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Jenny-Jen-Jen

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