In The Corner Of My mind

In The Corner Of My mind

A Poem by TheAimlessWanderer

The shadows crawl and twist
Creeping 
Creeping deeper 
Filling'
Filling my thoughts
They beckon me in the twilight
Grabbing' 
Pulling' 
Pulling me deeper 
Deeper into nothing
i'm falling 
i'm slipping 
Slipping away 
Into the ethereal 
The ethereal mist
Swallowing the moon
And the sun 
Deep' 
Deeper into the lifeless garden
Tainted 
Spread your corruption unto me 
So that i may grow
Grow into a vine 
Pulling away
Crawling
Creeping
Out 
Out of the fracture
The fracture
 
left by your presence
oh sweet madness 
you call to me as 
i do to you
let me crawl into you
and wear you as my own
a skin
a skin so that i may be whole
and so we dive into shadows 
hiding
hiding from the light
  
forever
Forever whole inside ?

© 2016 TheAimlessWanderer


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' let me crawl into you

and wear you as my own

a skin

a skin so that i may be whole '


I adore these lines. How achingly lovely. The longing and desire for this other person is described so beautifully and passionately here. Perfection

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

i think that sentiment is more beautiful than my actual meaning thank you very much for reading it g.. read more



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omg!!! that is soo deep!!! i just love your poem!! great

Posted 3 Years Ago


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TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much i love your poems too !!
i love this its ssoo dark and i can relate its clear what you feel fro your words Creeping deeper

Filling'

Filling my thoughts

They beckon me in the twilight

Grabbing'

Pulling'

Pulling me deeper

Deeper into nothing
wow those lines are the ones i love most

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

thank you glad you connected to it clearly (:

' let me crawl into you

and wear you as my own

a skin

a skin so that i may be whole '


I adore these lines. How achingly lovely. The longing and desire for this other person is described so beautifully and passionately here. Perfection

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

i think that sentiment is more beautiful than my actual meaning thank you very much for reading it g.. read more
Being around the wrong person
it can be an endless spiral of sorrow

you are a pretty expressive writer
i like the way you use your words
and the pauses you allow the reader to have

pretty smart

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

i like that interpretation of it not what i was going for but it is nice that it can have many diffe.. read more
Precious Seconds

3 Years Ago

its what makes writing of great value

perspective

I like your style a.. read more
TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

thank you very much. (:
This is so deep and sorrowful... I would say you're whole, but who am I to say such things, heh. Anyways, I could feel the emotions within your writing; it was nearly calling to me. Especially when you talked about corruption, I could feel the despair in these feelings. Great job, as usual!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

Wow thank you i am glad you felt drawn or connected in someway to what i wrote that is the best comp.. read more
Creative and well written!
I love the shortness of every line creating a dark atmosphere throughout the poem.
Thank you for the invite! :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

Your welcome glad you enjoyed it !
I am in love with this poem! Especially the repetition of the words. They set a perfect tone for all the reading.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

Wow thank you that is what i was going for by reiterating sending you on a long fall deeper and deep.. read more
Chris;
This is a pretty good piece that reminds me of my earlier works when I was 19. The one thing I find a bit off-putting is the repetition of words so close together. Try it without the extras and see how it sounds. What is good will become very good indeed.

example

Shadows crawl and twist,
creeping deeper,
filling my thoughts
beckoning me in the twilight
pulling me deeper
into nothing
I'm falling,
slipping away
into the ethereal mist.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

it was intentional but i thank you for the suggestion none the less i thought about it as i was writ.. read more

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