Flooding me in silence

Flooding me in silence

A Poem by TheAimlessWanderer
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a rap so rap it

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the phantasmal darkness 
the veiled heart piece 
a masked man
with words no one understands
a shattered promise
to be honest 
a hypocritical promise
to me 
veins hollow 
pumping cold air
into the void it goes
the place no one knows
lying here in ambiguity 
lying here in faith
i lie here 
emotion surrounding me
no room in this hollow heart piece 
swallowed by infinite darkness
"a lack thereof "
 a wish for silence
swallowed no choice
no words just hollow voice
the voices surround me
these words confound me
a disconnect
a resonance in dissonance 
compounded 
in the noise of silence 
filled with these hollow voices 
and meaningless choices
i drag myself through this cold void
cold air pouring from the fracture 
flooding me in silence...

© 2016 TheAimlessWanderer


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TheAimlessWanderer
would love as much constructive criticism as possible please don't sugar coat

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I can really relate to this poem right now so it made me a little emotional when I read it, but I feel like that means you've written it well. I was going to quote my favourite part of the poem, but then I realised that I'd end up quoting the entire thing! Your words resonate with me and I'm sure many others, and the way you describe your feelings is amazing. For me, it's a struggle to put my own into words, so I'm always impressed and maybe a little envious when others can. Thank you for writing this. Thank you for sharing this. It always takes a little bit of the weight on my shoulders off when I know that someone understands what I'm going through, that someone's been there, and that I'm not alone. Thank you. I really needed to see this tonight.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

I AM SO GLAD THAT THIS HELPED YOU !! i will struggle to express this in words but your comment made .. read more



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I really enjoyed this poem. As you described the darkness I felt as if I was in a very cold dark space. It was beautiful

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

glad you liked it thank you for thinking it was beautiful (:
I can really relate to this poem right now so it made me a little emotional when I read it, but I feel like that means you've written it well. I was going to quote my favourite part of the poem, but then I realised that I'd end up quoting the entire thing! Your words resonate with me and I'm sure many others, and the way you describe your feelings is amazing. For me, it's a struggle to put my own into words, so I'm always impressed and maybe a little envious when others can. Thank you for writing this. Thank you for sharing this. It always takes a little bit of the weight on my shoulders off when I know that someone understands what I'm going through, that someone's been there, and that I'm not alone. Thank you. I really needed to see this tonight.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

I AM SO GLAD THAT THIS HELPED YOU !! i will struggle to express this in words but your comment made .. read more
Very descriptive. How the voices and words in your head, the darkness surrounding your body, completely and utterly floods you. Great representation of how depression feels. Well done.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

Thank you very much i am glad you liked it !
Very nice. I like the format of this as well. Very appealing to the eye. Thank you

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

Thank you for reading it glad you enjoyed it !
I didnt know you wrote raps :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

i have one other one on here it is called beyond my hollow soul but i rap all the time out loud and .. read more
Ookpik

3 Years Ago

I hear you, I found that rap helped with fluidity in my poetry quite a bit. People dont generally co.. read more
TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

indeed i totally agree (: it was something i always did i used to be ashamed of it but it helps me c.. read more

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TheAimlessWanderer

British Columbia, Canada



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