Sleep Well

Sleep Well

A Poem by Daisy123

He gave me the butterflies

I haven't felt in a while

By just hearing him say "hey:)"

I couldn't help but smile

 

My mind was off in Wonderland

Like Alice and the Hatter

We took things slowly to start

But to us it didn't matter

 

I happily took his compliments

And everyone could see

That there was nothing I liked more

Than the thought of him and me

 

But the romance started to fade

We started talking less and less

The butterflies started to flutter away

And things became a mess

 

But I kept on making the effort

That much was plain to see

I did the best I could

He just wouldn't talk to me

 

He broke my fragile heart

Broke it like broken glass

But I guess that these things happen

These feelings will slowly pass

 

I hope that he sleeps well tonight

Because I doubt I will

But I do know that eventually

My heart will not be ill

© 2010 Daisy123


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"Broke it like broken glass" This line is redundant, because broken glass is already broken. Maybe try "shattered it like glass"?

I recognize the emotion here. I've written my share of poems that were more necessity than creativity (not that this wasn't creative. It's very personal.) Being Aquarius as well, I know that it's in our nature to view these events as abstract pieces in a much bigger puzzle of self realization. Keep writing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


all glass can be fixed.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Yes the wisdom is right in your words. Time will heal all wounds. If we are lucky we will be more careful and smarter. A very good poem.
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago


well done :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


Relation to this is something I can do.

Posted 14 Years Ago


i know this type of feeling and you express it beutifly

Posted 14 Years Ago


well, i cant relate.. but the story is kinda sad.. is this true? i hope you found someone better! :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like this a lot. Good job =]

Posted 14 Years Ago


Thanks everyone!:) yes its true...but writing this helped me get over it:)

Posted 14 Years Ago


Amazing. I can totally relate. Absolutely wonderful wording =) Brava!!

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Daisy123
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I'm an aquarius, im stubborn, im creative, and sometimes im too nice for my own good. And I love to write... obviously ;) more..

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