Eden

You may have been there yourself at some point!

Eden

It was that involuntary JIGGLE of your keys
First thing I heard when you stepped through the door
I STUMBLED upon that photo in your phone
I noticed you cleaning the interior of your car quite often
The downstairs couch has become your alibi

Now everything you do is FISHY , questionable, sneaky
Your phone never leaves your side
Your eyes always shifting back and forth
Never standing in one spot too long
irritation seems to be your new mode

DECEPTION always seemed to me such a cowardly road to walk
The OCCURANCE of these incidents are always shocking to me
Do I give the impression that I lack perception or intelligence ?
I feel like a TRAPPED mouse in a TRIANGLE running from corner to corner
Being sucked down into a bottomless cavity of quicksand

Once, I stood behind the YELLOW kitchen wall
The picture of Bogart, starred at me, it BURNT holes in my brain
I have been HANGED by the hand, that led me to the alter
I was trying not to breath , heart thumping sweat beads dripping down my neck

I could see you peeling your favorite food, APPLES your knife making a perfect circle of the rind as it fell onto your plate
Your eyes never leaving your phone
Your favorite food was turning brown, left untouched, messages went flying
The apple, how ironic , the ‘forbidden fruit’
And you, the snake sitting on my couch

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

Apples turn brown and start to rot pretty quick, don't they? Lack of eye contact as the vision of truth seen in the phone.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Hebe,
It is amazing really, that we who have trusted, somehow find out and then begins the process of pain we are given. "Eden" is a well written saga of this painful legacy acted out brazenly right before the eyes. The phone, the message carrier of deception, the apple ties perfectly also with the snake living on the couch. It is an intense poem you have written here and a good reminder of what many suffer..............blessings and enjoy a gentler time. You deserve respite for sure! ...........Kathy

[Hebe]

Thank you Kathy for your heartfelt review......unfortunately all included in the game called life !

[Kathy Van Kurin]

and we are smack dab in the middle of it and sometimes a crazy ride!

[Pete]

this is very clever and creative. betrayal casts an uncomfortable shadow on everything and puts all into question. severe consequences. some things never change. well done.

[Hebe]

Thank you Pete....yes severe consequences....

[Hebe]

Yes.... betrayal, it's devestating!

[Jade]

Yes, Betrayal is what I get from this write as well. well written

[Wicahpi]

Wow, powerful tale of betrayal; using all 10 given words in just the right spots.
I like the last two lines the best. Sums it all up quite nicely, with a punch.
Thank you for your entry into the 10 Words I Give contest!!

[Hebe]

Thank you for your comments, it was fun creating this poem, a definite test for your imagination!read moreThank you for your comments, it was fun creating this poem, a definite test for your imagination!