Eclipse Of Our Life

Eclipse Of Our Life

A Poem by Hebe
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Human suffering - can we change things?

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In a land that suffers from starvation

where white bones show laying in dry orange dust

vulnerable parched mouths, have scars of atrocities

where disease shrivels the carcass and ones radical opinions need no rendition

it only depicts grim and relentless human suffering

lets crush hope of all description!


We sit and watch in our vulgar prism

while in our garage we stuff our personal possessions

that are of no use to us anymore

seeped in our distorted forms of tradition

and inverted superficial western culture

our stellar image must portray propagandist materialistic wealth and happiness!

but reality depicts we are oceans away from any authenticity

just a slow strangulation in seaweed and plastic containers!

© 2018 Hebe


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'Eclipse Of Our Life'
Hebe,
Finding way past what is real and what is not- things are our distraction. Simple living is not seen often here in the west. If we spent less on things and more on our sisters and brothers...Wells of clean water, food, clothing to cover nakedness- there are many opportunities to help those who are just like us all over. They are on the other side of the world. They cry out here as well. Pick a charity. Their are many.
Blessings,
Kathy

Posted 1 Year Ago


This is, in my opinion at least a must read.... if anyone has ever considered the extent of human suffering all around us and if they looked up from their plasma TV's and fancy cocktails... they might, just might that is catch a glimpse..... You just reminded me of my time volunteering in Africa ... the orange dust did it for me... choke, sigh, choke..... Neville

Posted 1 Year Ago


Hebe

1 Year Ago

You experienced it first hand and i saw atrocities in India. It leaves scares, and humbles you........ read more
Neville

1 Year Ago

Thank you for yours..... All Good Things..... Neville
A scathing rant against First World countries, the West and all those who have lost sight of human suffering in lands of the Earth that have little personal significance to our own.

Materialism and self absorbed behaviour is one of the greatest plagues of our age. Too many are slaves to the almighty dollar and are content to sit on their stockpiles of assets, in their fake happiness, while true life and true human suffering occurs in the shadows of their vision. Sometimes it takes a serious personal tragedy to make people understand the true essence of life. And maybe that is what many of us need to learn.

A deep and meaningful write, Hebe. Timely and topical. Nicely conceived.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Hebe

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your meaningful comments, this seems to gave touched a lot of souls .....it ma.. read more
Does "were" = where in the first stanza?

Haves and have-nots, being given and working for it... on-the-dole and giving-a-dole... and all the whys of both sides - never end except when blame is mouthed. A whole lot of anger within the take mine and give it away routine... ever notice how many walk away from things given? And what really matters to most people when SHTF?

Posted 2 Years Ago


Hebe

2 Years Ago

Hi Chris, very true... everything has a beginning
and an end and that's when the SHTF and all.. read more
Chris

2 Years Ago

It was a natural, mind's eye revision each time I read it aloud - so I had to ask. Hope you're doin.. read more
Human suffering, the haves and have nots, the potential for so many to do so much for others, what, if anything, will motivate them to make a difference? Compassion and hope I pray will help bridge the gap that keeps some “oceans away from any authenticity” as you so beautifully put it. Sometimes it only takes one to start the journey of change and their courage and love for others will create a wave across the oceans and carry with them hope.


Posted 2 Years Ago


Hebe

2 Years Ago

Hi Taino, your review was heartfelt and yes I do hope one by one we create a wave across the oceans .. read more
the description, the imagery, the emotions and the moods created within that poem...very splendid.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Hebe

2 Years Ago

Thank you for stopping by, i appreciate your words :)
such a complex world filled with such an array of people and situations ...i hear the anthems of reaching out to help one another and the false security of "goods" ... i am reminded of the Bible reading "The poor you will always have with you, but you will not always have me." Matthew 26:11
reading feels like i am being preached at rather than put in the experience ... more a rant if you will ... although that may be your intent and it is strong and clear ... perhaps using a person not your self to show us the skin of experiencing being poor or being rich and callous ... just a couple ideas that came to me while reading ... i like the free form a lot ... your poem has deep meaningful truths and lessons to take away with me this morning ... i honestly struggle with what and how much to give .. and to whom .. all the time .. for the masses in the middle class when money has to fix the car or our childrens health ..giving to others of necessity has to slip a bit .. so i feel guilty :{ ah well .. we do our best eh!? great read...obviously you really engaged me ;)
E.


Posted 2 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Suffering may be felt individually but its alleviation is social and requires not only social cooperation but social institutions that work together effectively. Thank you for sharing your own thoughts and feelings – the world has a long way to go to tackle this issue …. bless :-)

Posted 2 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hebe

2 Years Ago

Thank you Phill, yes your right we do need global organization but we also need to fly under one fla.. read more
For my weak eyes your italics were hard to read but a bold strong poem in message, well done.

Posted 2 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hebe

2 Years Ago

Hi Andrew.... sorry, I should make it bigger!....but thank you for your review always appreciate it!
Hebe

2 Years Ago

It is better now... made it bigger, now I can read it easier too!
andrew mitchell

2 Years Ago

much better:):)
This was a very strong write, made even more powerful with the bold presentation... Dark against a backdrop of white... Kind of like my material happiness... Hah... Plastic containers, eh...? Amazingly penned, really...

Posted 2 Years Ago


Hebe

2 Years Ago

Thank you Silente for your comments.... hey even recycling goes a long way ;)

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