Samantha and Avery

Beautiful, brown curls
Eyes that one could not define. 
A soul, soothing smile. 

Her name, Samantha. 

Her heart, full of acceptance. 
Love, understanding.

But there was just one, 

That captured heart, mind and soul. 
His name was Avery. 

The way that she felt,
seemed so natural and real. 
Deep, connected friendship. 

Much stronger than that
crazed, toxic-filled obsession. 
It was a raw love. 

Never before felt, 
never before loved, ever so. 
But loved, forever. 

A problem arouse.
He claimed, differently. 
For him there was no true love. 

Avery had felt, 

that it was a close friendship. 
She knew, differently. 

Something stronger felt. 
A force pulling them closer. 
An understanding. 

She just did not know, 

and she was incapable of
understanding it. 

She just knew that it was, 

something real and something raw. 
Something beautiful. 

Reviews

[M.Babu]

"Never before felt,
never before loved, ever so.
But loved, forever."
I cannot explain just how much I love this specific stanza Daisy! The first line carries such a slight hesitation, the second a sort of dulling self-pity, and the third a bursting ray of sun into the world of doubt. Such a brilliant roller coaster of a stanza - I'm enthralled you managed to pull that on me in just three lines!
Magnifique!
~M.Babu~

[Daisy Moon]

Oh you ♡ Thank you as always for your kind words

[K. Harding]

This is a very good example how not to overload sentences and stanzas with descriptive nonsense that often kills poet's poems. I think this is very good however I feel like you could take away one or two stanzas and not lose any real depth of tension of the poem. Good job though :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice beginning to a relationship. I like the honest tone and the personal feel of the words. A excellent opening chapter.
Coyote