cafuné

cafuné (n): the act of tenderly running your fingers through your lover's hair

your lips mark my pale skin ephemerally:

the fragmented red pattern of a newly removed wrist watch

the coffee mug stain on the cover of a notebook

they burn there amorously in the shimmering border

between your memory and your actual flesh

tingling with absence against the inside of my thighs

and the soft spot between my rib cage and hip bone. 

i feel the phantom of your hand there

a puzzle pieced skeleton key into the hidden corners

of my body. interlaced limbs lay wistful. 

admire the stains that you’ve left on me

like a rose blushing sun swatch on a delicate apricot 

beauty exists in bruises- a paroxysm of the temperaments too strong

to remain within the confines of our bodily cage,

manifesting in an ashen technicolor around the edges.

engrave the scent of your hair into my wanton palms

and caress me down into your lap

to show you that i can make you whole

as you run your whispering fingers through my hair. tug. 

Cafuné . 

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Dana, wow...this is absolute ambrosial ecstasy...the mundane little trademarks of everyday life get a shot of lustful adrenaline here...after the watch is removed and the coffee mug leaves its trademark stain, carnal bliss takes over...one of the sexiest reads I've come across in some time, and even though it's more than the eroticism that makes this piece arguably my favourite of yours to date, it doesn't hurt the cause...I didn't realize it before I read this, but you know how to spin a fantasy :)

[Dana Alsamsam]

ah wow thank you so much! i guess i'm rather thankful that these are just true feelings that stem from some stuff happening in my life right now. i'm glad i could share and let you live the fantasy. this is such a wonderful comment and i appreciate your kind words so much!

[kublakhan27]

I'm happy to know that this was written from the heart, not that I doubted it, knowing that all of your writing is :) I'm glad to hear you affirm it though...always a pleasure my friend, keep the wonderful poetry coming :)

[Astro]

Gorgeous Dana, borderline mature I'm sure for some, but delicate in execution. A sensual masterpiece, that brushes past the eyes and rests upon the ear while it spreads 'Cafune-like' with poetic fingers through your hair. Not even the devil could entice with such visually appealing spells as you have cast here.

[Dana Alsamsam]

i swear your reviews in themselves should be poetry. thank you so incredibly much!

[Astro]

I try my best, finding it hard sometimes to review with such zeal when reviewing others poetry, but yours has often drawn the lines of a subject in such a way that it ignites my creative juices and forces them out in reverent designs.

[Dana Alsamsam]

as does yours for me! so great to have such genuine reviews from someone :)

[Astro]

Well thank you for saying so, and you are most welcome and truly one of my favorites on this site.

[sparkle]

sensual write , very affective , well done dandoneh , very good work sister :)

[Frieda P]

This one dips and sways you at the same time, oh my, is there anything more sensual than having someone run their fingers through your hair whilst making love...big SIGH...luverly beyond words.

[Dana Alsamsam]

ah thank you so much! it possibly is the most sensual thing i've ever felt and the fact that there is a word for it makes me so happy.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very sensual write, with a good dose of tasteful subtlety...

and i like how we feel the after effects of the passion, even after the two have parted...they can still feel each other's presence, touch..warmth etc.

nicely worded, Dana.

jacob

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much!

[Pete Langley]

As I imagine your secret smile as you recall a sublime interlude with completely erotic candour, I am embarrassed at the images, like an interloper peeking around the door of your memory. Graphic and superb, Dana. P.

[Dana Alsamsam]

i definitely had a little mischievous smile on my face while writing this- it was fun recalling and conjuring the images... thank you so much as always, P!

[Archangel Gabriel]

A very sensual and intelligent write Dana

[Clockwork]

One thing I have noticed after reading a few a few of your poems is that you always have this exhilarating energy in your work. I'll describe it as a real desire to live and a deep hunger to by heard.

I think these lines have some of what I'm talking about. They are my favorites from this piece:

i feel the phantom of your hand there/
a puzzle pieced skeleton key into the hidden corners/
of my body.

Those lines make me remember exactly what that feeling is like on the male end of the spectrum. Its one thing to read something, but you make me feel that.

I also liked your descriptions/images. The part about the coffee mug stain and then the engraving of his scent on your palms really stood out to me.

With that said, I really liked what I saw here. I have a few suggestions about the flow in a few places, and a few of the abstract images, but not a whole lot really.

[Dana Alsamsam]

thank you so much for your in depth review and kind words! that is the best complement you could give- that you were able to really feel the images that i displayed.

[Clockwork]

You're welcome. Honestly, you never fail to deliver in that department.

[Dana Alsamsam]

if you have time- feel free to message me your suggestions about flow/images! i know sometimes i could do better in those areas.

[Clockwork]

Ok, I will mull that over while I'm making dinner, and we will see later tonight.

[Tomahawk Joe]

a sensual and original piece