Warp

I really enjoy the concept of this one and there are several directions you can take it. In contrast to Cosmic Warriors, which although visually appealing I found to be a bit dry and more on the generic sci-fi side, this story is far more original. The characters are more interesting and the descriptive parts flow better rather than being a forced distraction from the action. I didn't mean for that rhyme. Whatever. If done right, this could be a excellent mix of humor, action, wonder, and...I don't know, other stuff. You might even think about disecting Cosmic Warriors and putting the best parts into this story. Like mages on giant lizards. That's cool. I think Phillip would like that. You could give him some kid-sized magic armor. Eh? Just don't have any crazy sex scenes or use the f-word and you could probably work this into a decent selling young adult book.

Posted 13 Years Ago