Higgs Field

A short homage to all of those who have overcome their own struggles and are now helping others overcome theirs.

Higgs Field

Once, we flirted with Antigravity,

And were seduced by her sagacity,

Now here we are, two Voyagers venturing into the void,

Sending ripples through Relativity

With the solar-winds of Audacity,

So we can terraform every world we find to be devoid

Of Sagan streams imbued with dulcet dreams,

And crepuscular skies where star-storms beam

Onto every shadowy soul that screams

To know what it feels like to truly gleam.

Once, we were consumed by our own entropy,

And were strangled by negative enthalpy,

Until we heard the multiverse murmur to the human race,

Now here we are, our hearts wiser than White Dwarves,

Entangled by Destiny's magnetic force,

Transcending tesseracts and irradiating hyperspace

With the warmest wavelengths we can create.

Author's Note

Well, I've had many of the lines in this short poem in my head for quite some time, but I just couldn't make anything anywhere near as grandiose as I wanted to with them. So, today, while thinking about them, I decided to simplify things for a change and just write as much substance as I could think of. Overall, I'm kinda alright with the result. Perhaps this is a bit too short (I can't 100% decide), but that's alright. I just really wanted to get these ideas out of my head, so I can focus on other ideas for a bit. I might come back to this someday, when I'm struck by newfound inspiration for it, but for now, it's just going to remain like this. Anyway, tell me what you think of this little "demo"! Is it too short? I'll see you all next time around! :)

Update. As of now, this piece has been completed. I may still rewrite it someday, but for now, it has a finish that I'm satisfied with. :)

Reviews

[Lovecraft]

Well, I'm actually somewhat flabbergasted. Beautiful word choice, I must say. Seems like sci-fi romanticism, if that makes sense, lol. The words and rhymes seem to be a perfect fit IMO. This almost reads as a love letter to the universe.

Either way, this is just an astounding thing to read. I imagined the endless places beyond space and time when I read this.

Truly amazing work, Dan!

[DoormanDan]

I'm flattered by your praise of this piece, Lovecraft. I spent many hours working on this particular one, and am happy to hear that you enjoyed it so much. Thanks for reading :)

[Lovecraft]

No problem. Also, this poem reminds me a bit of Interstellar. Which is a compliment, fyi. :)

[DoormanDan]

Well, that I'm extremely happy to hear, as that is actually my favorite movie! XD

[Lovecraft]

That scene where he watches the tapes though.
Heartbreaking.

[DoormanDan]

Such a brilliant scene. Heart wrenches every time.

[G.W. Saitreux]

I absolutely despise the choice of font color, it takes away from the overall meaning of the poem which resonates well and was well-written.

[DoormanDan]

Well, I sincerely appreciate your honesty in your review! I just don't like using the boring old default text color in my writing, as it just lacks any form of life. Anyway, thanks for reading :)

[Yari Garcia]

I really enjoyed this poem! Very creative. I love the whole space theme. I love poems like this one, that take one topic and make absolute art out of it.

Very well done :-) You should be satisfied with it. It was amazing.

Yari

[DoormanDan]

Thank you! I really appreciate you sharing your thoughts on my writing! :)

[Ajla]

Well written, great world choice, love the way you make readers feel the emotions. Not too short.. I enjoyed this .

[DoormanDan]

I"m happy to hear you enjoyed reading this, and am grateful for your input. Thank you so much for reading! :)

[Ajla]

No problem !

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice journey in your words. I liked how you used the language. You made the reader feel the emotions leading to hopeful ending. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[DoormanDan]

And thank you for your praise of my writing. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and I enjoyed this one.