Cycle

Cycle

A Poem by DoormanDan
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Just a quick, simplistic piece I wrote today, pertaining to the less than stellar way I've been handling life lately.

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Cycle

I swear I once knew what I
Was trying to convey in these lines,
But now when I sit to write,
A stampede of doubt engulfs my mind.

I swear I once had both the cause and confidence
To secure a reason for my existence,
But lately I've been wandering without guidance,
And have been questioning my own importance.

When did I become so emotional,
So insecure, and hypocritical?
Am I just over-analytical,
Or is this kind of cycle not normal?
I can't seem to decipher this design.
I can't make my heart and soul realign.
I can't submerge my skyline in sunlight
And rid my conscience of this noxious night.

Such thoughts are unbecoming
To the distance crawled so far,
But I can't keep pretending
That my own words never mar
My mind.
Like a candlestick melting,
I was always my own star,
Until my wick ceased burning,
Now I quaver in the dark,
So blind.

When did I become so emotional,
So insecure, and hypocritical?
Am I just over-analytical,
Or is this kind of cycle not normal?
I can't seem to decipher this design.
I can't make my heart and soul realign.
I can't submerge my skyline in starlight
And rid my conscience of this noxious night.

© 2018 DoormanDan


Author's Note

DoormanDan
Howdy. This piece is nothing special in any way whatsoever. I really only wrote this for venting after having a....disappointing day, to say the least. It's based on bad thought habits I've been adopting lately (of which I'm trying very hard to break free from as of now), and is 100% meant to be down to Earth lyric wise, unlike most of my other pieces. It only took me an hour or so to write this, as compared to the usual three to five hours it takes for me to usually write a piece, so it's probably not as smooth as my work usually is. That's alright in this case, though. This was just therapy more than anything. Anyway, tell me what you think, as usual! I'm currently dealing with finals time in college, so I should be coming back with real material soon! Until next time. :)

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Well the answers we won’t always have the answer for- the reason... many things left unexplained - not needing to be concrete or making sense- sometimes confusion is clarity- great words🌹

Posted 1 Year Ago


DoormanDan

1 Year Ago

Very true, very true. I'm in a much better mindset now than I was when writing this. More than any.. read more
‘Thoughts In Time’🌹

1 Year Ago

Your work is great and yes all in due time- sure it’s going to be great- pleasure is mine🌹
Did you write this poem about me, Dan? I loved reading it. I loved it even more especially when I could relate so much to it.
"But lately I've been wandering without guidance,
And have been questioning my own importance."

Don't say this write is nothing special, it was special to me.

Posted 1 Year Ago


DoormanDan

1 Year Ago

Lol, this is a rather relatable topic, ain't it? Life is stressful, that's for sure, and me writing.. read more
I actually like that the rhythm shifts - it feels hesitant, stop-and-start, which meshes with the content. It feels overwhelmed and disillusioned in a way that translates to the reader. I mean, is it the most carefully penned, perfect poem? No. But I think what I like about this one is that perfection is the farthest possible thing from the point.

Posted 1 Year Ago


DoormanDan

1 Year Ago

That's exactly the point here. I wrote this in a moment of pure venting, and thus, did not focus on.. read more
S. E. Butler

1 Year Ago

Yes, I noticed that - this would be incredible set to music!
Maybe it's only me but for me personally the flow was kind of confusing.
It was extremely emotional. Don't get me wrong emotions are great but if it over clouds your writing then it becomes a problem.
Hope you find this helpful.

Posted 1 Year Ago


DoormanDan

1 Year Ago

Hmmm....I probably could've worded my response here a little better. Sorry if I came across as a bi.. read more
Jadewood

1 Year Ago

It was not harsh at all. I am sorry if i offended you, I really didn't mean to.
I always app.. read more
DoormanDan

1 Year Ago

Oh no, don't worry, I didn't take any offense to your review at all! I just said what I said becaus.. read more
You mention a bad day brought on this writing. I'm sure if people could write down what they're feeling every time something bad happened, you would see similar thoughts. I remember well feeling like I was off life's track many times so I can relate to elements of this writing. I think everyone has bad thoughts they'd like to eliminate.

Posted 1 Year Ago


DoormanDan

1 Year Ago

Very true. This wasn't 100% venting after a single bad incident, I'll admit. It's more accumulativ.. read more
It's nice. I like it. Kind of hard to read since English isn't my first language.

Posted 1 Year Ago


DoormanDan

1 Year Ago

Thanks for sharing your thoughts and reading regardless! For somebody who's primary language isn't .. read more
 송지석 / Ji-Suk

1 Year Ago

Oh thank you for you kind comment! c:

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College Burnout, DE



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