Confliction

Hot flames sear your words into my skin,

Leaving scars of all the places you’ve been.

Clouds under my feet but thorns upon my head.

Soul floating in the sky but body lying in bed.

And the Screams are muffled by white lace,

The thrashing silenced by a firm embrace.

Tangled in pleasure, pain, and temptation

Wrapped up in suffocating frustration.

And the culmination of pure deprivation,

Is overflowing into a fire of escalation.

Praying for rain in a dessert of gratification.

Eyes closed, grasps tighten

Clenched jaw, breaths lighten

Sweat leaves a path down bare skin

Chest rises and falls as hands are pinned

A beautiful sight of a loss of control,

Letting go and freeing the soul.

Suppressed passion really took its toll.

Reviews

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Great composition and content – love the word flow and expressions! I’m a little unsure about the stanza structure and (if I may suggest) – I believe the imagery would be enhanced by reshaping the format as follows:

Hot flames sear your words
Into my skin
Leaving scars of all the places
You’ve been
Clouds under my feet
But thorns upon my head
Soul floating in the sky
But body lying in bed

And the Screams
Are muffled by white lace
The thrashing silenced
By a firm embrace
Tangled in pleasure and pain
And temptation
Wrapped up
In suffocating frustration


And the culmination
Of pure deprivation
Is overflowing
Into a fire
Of escalation
Praying for rain
In a dessert
Of gratification


Eyes closed
Grasps tighten
Clenched jaw
Breaths lighten
Sweat leaves
A path down bare skin
Chest rises and falls
As hands are pinned

A beautiful sight
Of a loss of control
Letting go
And freeing the soul
Suppressed passion
Really took
Its
Toll ….

Hope you like the revamp!

[Bare trees]

I like the way you rhymed in this very much. Expressing your feelings in writing is a great way to heal.

[Lyrically Inclined]

A beautiful journey of sensuality! Nice write!