Intertwined

Rough hands interlaced with smooth skin,

Following lines back from where they begin.

Entangled in an embrace so beautifully defeating,

Blood rushing through veins, two hearts beating.

Breathe you in and breathe me out,

Tracing fingertips across a pout.

Breathe me out and breathe you in,

Trailing fingertips down hot skin.

Where does the ocean end and the sky begin?

Thunderstorms igniting the light within.

It’s hot and humid and the air is so thick.

The raindrops on the pavement so rhythmic.

A striking symphony of beats and sound

The angels above, our feet on the ground.

This life will be scenic if you let it,

The darken path astounds when moonlit,

A little grit, a little spit, and a banana split

Just keep going, just don’t quit.

Reviews

[Kent Rawski]

A flash of lightnings panorama, our souls silhouette forever is how I'd end the last 2 lines of this sensual experience just my thoughts I really like how this write uses the physical and emotional senses. Change that last word to together not forever it summarizes entertwined😉

[Chris]

Quite a romantic affect 'til the last two lines... the change of thought's direction was a bit jarring - least to me.

[Daniielle7]

agreed, I really don't like this poem much. It's not my best work.

[Kent Rawski]

Seems you kind of just gave up at the end rearrange that you'll be proud of this good work

[John the Baptist]

Quite erotic in its restraint, well paced and well rhymed. Good work.

[KCthelastboyscout]

Reading this feels like a moment of clarity. when you were writing this were you at peace with yourself? Beautifuly written.feels like a soft rain