Feelings

Don't like dark poems? don't read this one

Just a few days ago,
I would look forward to tomorrow.
We would be together,
And i'd keep telling you forever,
That our love can't be broken..ever.
Just a look at your face,
Beats the ace.
Being loved,
Is all i ever wished for you,
Everything is all i would do for you.
Just to see you smile again,
Just to hold you close again...

But unfortunately...
There is society.
They took us apart...
They think all is forgiven.
But they never said sorry,
Not like i could forgive them,
But atleast i could tell em.
You are countless miles away,
Somewhere, in another city.
Blessed is the ground you walk on,
Cursed are all who wish you harm.

The soul of this world,
Has been sold,
But this story has already been told.
I wish only for us to be together,
My love you are forever.
Whether i live or die,
I will always love you.

Reviews

[Destiny Dreamer]

WOW very well written. Outstanding work with words, I can feel the pain that you have described in the Poem. Amazing longing poem, so full of thoughts and emotions. Love will never die, as long as the love is true miles doesn't matter. Keep writing dear Poet!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you.

[Destiny Dreamer]

You are WELCOME!

[Celie Rose]

Enjoyed your chapter..."There is society. They took us apart... The soul of this world, Has been sold." Society will always judge what they don't understand...being apart from some you love does not make the love go away. Love only grows stronger.. Nicely written. Keep writing Danny!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

thank you :)

[B]

Sometimes two are destined to enjoy a moment
but some greedy by stander that is already involved in a relationship would take any opportunity to break that
society can be ugly sometimes
but somehow they both look into each other's eyes and drift away
like your words here

you should listen to Debbie Reynolds
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZMwtRfeOGig&list=RDZMwtRfeOGig#t=0

She is an angel

[erinwrites]

Very powerful and well written, you clearly portrayed the heartbreak and fury of your narrator. I really liked it :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :)

[AaronFreitas]

I definitely like dark and I definitely like this one IM. You express yourself so well and it's amazing how I can understand and relate to many of the dark writes you post. I enjoy them all you are truly a talented writer my friend :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

The same can be said for you my friend. :) thanks for taking the time to read and review :)

[AaronFreitas]

Always IM... you are a true friend :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you :) you are a great friend. :)

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Hi IM:) I'm not sure that I've been here before, however, I shall return:) This was so sad and full of love.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Hi. Thank you.

[Cool Girl]

Sad and remarkably precious at the same time. This piece was both beautiful and depressing. The word choice helped to embrace the tone and emotion giving it a unique style and flavor. You did an excellent job.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you very much.

[GreenEyedPoet]

Sad but very well written piece IM.
It's full of emotion and longing and you describe the pain well, the reader can definitely feel it all while reading this piece.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you.

[Chelsea Lavender]

This is really sad but well written, you can see the pain through the choice of words and the way you have structured the poem. I enjoyed it!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Thank you.