Its the same

Its the same

A Chapter by Dani The Unreviewed
"

Hell...love. Makes people crazy.

"
Awake...
Or asleep.
Who knows? its really deep.
No way out,
Not like i want to get out.
Its plague, its cancer,
Without it, life will cancel.
No cure, no hope,
Its a rope.

Hopelessly, drifting off,
Off to sleep, in a dream,
Where i'm awake,
But i'm asleep.

The same scent,
The message sent,
The same sight,
Open my eyes wide. its all right.
The same voice,
The same choice.
In the same room,
The same big boom,
The same hour, the same second,
First, not second.
The same thirst,
The same energy burst.

Wake up, and fall asleep,
In the same reality, same dream.


© 2016 Dani The Unreviewed


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dan
This is actually quite well-written. The irregular rhyme illustrates that not all rhymes need to follow a rigid structure to convey a thought. This is a nice format for you, the poem grips the reader and pulls the reader along, wondering what the bend in the road will bring. Keep it up. take care...dan

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

Thanks for readin, and reviewin.



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B
I know this one as well
It's you lie to yourself saying tomorrow it wont be like that
you open your eyes
and he just comes so fast
its like hold on
i just opened my eyes
of course he is a thought
he isnt actually there
lucky me lol
sucks

Posted 8 Years Ago


B

8 Years Ago

Waw
U beat me there
Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

lol. when it comes to. icecream, people better get outta ma way. lol
B

8 Years Ago

lol
I know the feeling
Owww ... very intense piece here. Felt reading it. Great job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much :)
Nice work IM... I like the rhyming you used it worked well in this write. It's a great write I enjoyed it very much :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Yeah! I mean this one is so powerful. Your writes make me remember what a great thing writing really is.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A writer

8 Years Ago

No need to thank me. :)
Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

You are so kind :)
A writer

8 Years Ago

I know. Lol. :)
This is powerful, I was sucked right into this ..just brilliant IM :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

Thank you.
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dan
This is actually quite well-written. The irregular rhyme illustrates that not all rhymes need to follow a rigid structure to convey a thought. This is a nice format for you, the poem grips the reader and pulls the reader along, wondering what the bend in the road will bring. Keep it up. take care...dan

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

Thanks for readin, and reviewin.
Aww hell. This is really messin me up.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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