I'll be...

I'll be...

A Chapter by Dani The Unreviewed
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Thanks for reading :) any thoughts are welcome, as ALWAYS. :)

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God abandoned you,
Fate plays its dirty games,
Settin free the blood in your veins.

I'll be your lord,
You blindly follow,
I'll be the one that cares,
Unheard prayers, no more.
I'll be the hope,
The rope, when you fall deep.
I'll be the fire,
In the cold of night,
I'll be your light,
When everything is dark.
You, the devil will not stalk.
No more pain,
I'll be the flames in your heart,
I'll be the the moon,
When you are the sun.


© 2016 Dani The Unreviewed


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Dani The Unreviewed
Any thoughts are welcome :) thanks for readin :)

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i saw what you commented on my poem and sorry i havent been getting to your read requests lately, ill always get to them eventually. anyways, i think this poem fits in really well with the rest of your Love Poems collection. keep it up and ill keep reading

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

Oh...okay :) i tell that to anyone who keeps sendin them, but is not takin them for a very long time.. read more
Not here

8 Years Ago

no problem. its totally understandable



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RJ
This is really good :) I hope you do realize how good you are. And I'm not just saying that cuz I'm your girlfriend. You really are talented you just need to find inspiration :D And if you can't just write about a pineapple ^_^

Posted 8 Years Ago


Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

lol. I did write. .
RJ

8 Years Ago

Yeah but that wasnt about you being happy. I'm not the only one who wants you to be happy. And norma.. read more
Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

lol. I'm not depressed.. &I write about whatever I want. if it's good, it'll be read, if not then i.. read more
Danny, another beautiful piece.."God abandoned you, I'll be your lord," I feel you. Love the honesty, expression and emotion. Keep writing, you are doing a great job.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

thank you very much!
Hey buddy. I made a few grammar edits for you. It was very magical though.

God abandoned you.
Fate plays its dirty games,
Setting free the blood in your veins.

I'll be your lord,
You blindly follow.
I'll be the one that cares.
Unheard prayers, no more.
I'll be the hope.
The rope, when you fall deep.
I'll be the fire,
In the cold of night.
I'll be your light,
When everything is dark.
You, the devil will not stalk.
No more pain.
I'll be the flames in your heart,
I'll be the the moon,
When you are the sun.


Posted 8 Years Ago


Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

thank you :)
McBear

8 Years Ago

My pleasure buddy
Magical :)
"I'll be the one that cares".
"I'll be your light when everything is dark".
"I'll be the moon, when you are the sun".
Quoted my favourite lines :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Shah Sabia

8 Years Ago

You're always welcome :)
Hello Dan, nicely done, your choices of words are always
interesting, " ill be your rope when you fall deep" love that line..
Good Job, Thanks.


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much :)
i saw what you commented on my poem and sorry i havent been getting to your read requests lately, ill always get to them eventually. anyways, i think this poem fits in really well with the rest of your Love Poems collection. keep it up and ill keep reading

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

Oh...okay :) i tell that to anyone who keeps sendin them, but is not takin them for a very long time.. read more
Not here

8 Years Ago

no problem. its totally understandable
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Gee
There for you.Some really good lines in this,nice Danny

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

Sorry...i'm a bit late with this...the previous comment didn't show up... Thank you soooo very much .. read more
Nice work buddy :) "I'll be your light, when everything is dark." Deep words my friend

Posted 8 Years Ago


Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

Thank you :)
A beautiful piece Danny. I'm adding this to all my library shelves. A beautiful poem about caring for someone. You are the best writer ever!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Dani The Unreviewed

8 Years Ago

Thank you :)
A writer

8 Years Ago

You are always welcome :)

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