Sky

Sky

A Story by Aldora Sparrow
"

Six word poem

"

And the sky fell, 

almost soundlessly

© 2010 Aldora Sparrow


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This is amazing, I know it was for the "six word story contest" but perhaps for the poetry contest you could have played with a line break. I think that if you were to break it like "And the sky fell/ almost soundlessly"
having the "almost" begin a line would emphasised it all the more. But this is a very strong piece as is, great job!



Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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It creates a vivid image in the mind. Nice

Posted 8 Years Ago


It's wonderful! It says so much without saying anything at all.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Powerful and simple. Aggressive and expressive.

Great job. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


thanks for submitting this! it's amazing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is amazing, I know it was for the "six word story contest" but perhaps for the poetry contest you could have played with a line break. I think that if you were to break it like "And the sky fell/ almost soundlessly"
having the "almost" begin a line would emphasised it all the more. But this is a very strong piece as is, great job!



Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

soo short, but such powerful words. fascinating! Really gets me thinking...

Posted 9 Years Ago


Wow... that's so awesome! i love short poems because, behind the words, there is so much meaning! i love this poem! one of my favorites! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Congratulations for winning the six-word story contest!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on March 30, 2009
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Aldora Sparrow
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I have been writing for longer than I can remember, but it was only during 7th grade did I start to write outside of class. I am still inexperienced and I love helpful comments. I love to write fa.. more..

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